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This, our dilemma . . . Tanka
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This, our dilemma . . . Tanka |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
this our dilemma honesty is truth to self and integrity is the truth you show others soul's integrity requires truthfulness with self else integrity is dead Live for love. Without love, you don't live. [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
LOVED the part about soul's integrity--honest self evaluation is essential. Thoughtful piece here! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This should be a plaque in every huge corporation world-wide, well said! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I got to say you've got it just write~if you know what I mean.....good job! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Truly, truly. This likes me very much. Well done. |
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JCGF Member
since 2001-01-19
Posts 72MA |
I like it too. Thanks again.  Tammy |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
serenity ~ Thank you. I try to think at least once a week Mysteria ~ Amen. ethome ~ Yore absolutely write Thanx my friend.poeminister ~ Yes, it does JCGF ~ I am glad. Thank you.
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
This quite good, But a Tanka is usually considered A five line poem of 5-7-5-7-7 , Yours add an extra 5-7. But what ever called I liked it. The original pattern of Tanka (short poem) established centuries ago was a length of twelve sound-units, pausing after the fifth and seventh unit. Two twelve-unit segments were joined, with the closure a final seven-sound phrase added. This means that a Tanka has three parts and each one capable of standing alone. this our dilemma honesty is truth to self and integrity is the truth you show others soul's integrity requires truthfulness with self else integrity is dead You have the three sections of the Tanka. Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Acutally, professor, a Tanka can be of any length as long as it starts 57 as a senryu or a Haiku. It must end 77. Therefore, it could be 57577 or 5757577, etc. Furthermore, it could be on the form of 35 with the same rules as above. It just takes more skill. Thanks for the comment and I'm glad you liked it Of course, I could be wrong. And, if I am, I will call this form the "Interloper." Sayonara. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 06-01-2001).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ohhhhhh  I like Interloper's form *wink wink....nudge nudge* You rock sweetie! |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
What's in a name when the words are right... Love it dearly my friend Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Short form, is a favorite of mine. The discipline of thought always hooks me. In this we have an additional gift - the one of integrity. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
SEA ~ You are a constant source of inspiration to me. Bless you, darlin' Titia ~ You are fast becoming one of my favorite readers. Thank you Julian ~ Amen! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
Be true to your self. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Great stuff!!! And how does one teach integrity...by example only is surely the case. Well done!!! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
You have said a mouthful!!!! Great job!!!! The answers to life's questions always lie within. All writing comes |
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BrightStar Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 219 |
This really is good and should go back Admiring you at Passions. [This message has been edited by BrightStar (edited 06-03-2001).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thoughtful poem, Interloper...well done! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
BrightStar ~ I try VAS ~ Thanx Lone Wolf ~ There I go "talking" with my mouth full again BrightStar ~ *blush* Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 06-03-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Martie ~ Sorry I missed you. THanks for the thought Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Interloper, How true this is. Well done, strong poem.. stronger message. TaraB |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Interloper's form...LOL... i was taught that the syllable count for a tanka is 5-7-5-7-7 but anyway, i honestly think that this is one of the best tankas i have come across so far... to my library this goes..keep thinking, all right... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
very nice... enjoyed these words much... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
rosepetals25 ~ What a wonderful comment. thank you faterider ~ I think this is your first visit to my work. Thank you. I think that "form name" has a ring to it, don't you? Greeneyes ~ Thanks for stopping by Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my.....I love this interloper form....or tanka form....or whateva....glad that i've found it as I love these lines that you've wrote here.... ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Charisma ~ *sigh* Thank you for the hugs Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth |
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