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Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

0 posted 2001-06-01 12:26 PM

~for K~

Largos

   Your ariose voice
                  is cabled
and wears the sound of  the sea
   Each thought arrives
                    before you
rebreathe the last whisper
   A seductress calling me
                          from sleep
with words  gently
   disappearing into
              my fantasy
reborn into a nautical dream
   where a musical ship
                      must ferry
your words to me in song

   No journey of ease in
             tranquil leisure
a bond of harmony
   is formed with
           the shore
   There are no mermaids
                    riding  waves
to kiss drowning sailors
   so hymns are offered
               to lighthouses
that answer  in steady bright beats

   Each note is
      a promise
of hope  that endures
   within each song
   as  yet unwritten
every dream left unscored
   I frown as
    I wonder
if a deafened Beethoven
   was cursed with
        silent dreams
or maybe in blessed sleep
   he found his salvation
                               not in
sawing legs from pianos
   but through walking meadows
                                   in the night
accompanied by his pastoral sixth

   It's easy to
          dream
with my eyes closed
   I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours
   I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me
to find your voice again cabled
   thickly whispering goodnights
                                     and regrets
It is your time now to dream

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

[This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 06-01-2001).]

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-06-01 12:57 PM

Jamie~
This is most sincerely tender ~

'I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours'

She will love it !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

inot2B
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since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

2 posted 2001-06-01 01:15 AM

I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me

Loved these lines. Makes all the sense in the world.

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

3 posted 2001-06-01 08:22 AM

~She does love it...

Jamie...

'There are no mermaids
                    riding  waves
to kiss drowning sailors
   so hymns are offered
               to lighthouses
that answer  in steady bright beats'

this speaks to me on poetic image alone...whereas this:

'I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me
to find your voice again cabled
   thickly whispering goodnights
                                     and regrets
It is your time now to dream'

speaks to my heart.

Thanks for today: 'Oh, I just love Tiffanies!' heh.

Can't wait till the next time...and more, when it's 'properly' again..

Hugs sweetie...and thank you for this wonderful wonderful poem...

K

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 06-01-2001).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-06-01 08:33 AM

Your ariose voice
                  is cabled
and wears the sound of  the sea
   Each thought arrives
                    before you
rebreathe the last whisper
===============================

   It's easy to
          dream
with my eyes closed
   I can taste the
    distant winds
that sweeten  austere sails
   with a lingering scent
               freshly missed
and unmistakably yours
   I can hear you
          calling me
and should feel your breath
   It’s  very absence
           awakens me
===============================

my goodness this is enchanting!!
such beautiful imagery and superb employ of metaphor and comparisons to the sea to define the longing and emotions.
Miss K, has again inspired magic from your pen...
(and look Kam, no cliches')

excellent write Jamie, touching and tender.
jm

I'm hanging on your every word
Even if you dont want to speak tonite
It's alright
I'm sitting outside heaven's door
listening to you breathe

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

5 posted 2001-06-01 09:25 AM

It really is a beautiful dreamsong you have written! I wonder if he was cursed with silent dreams???

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-06-01 10:34 AM

I am very impressed with this write.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

7 posted 2001-06-01 09:12 PM

Simply lovely!!!!

Poet deVine

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Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2001-06-02 10:30 PM

Forgot to add this to my library!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2001-06-03 12:16 PM

Jamie..This makes me catch my breath with the expression of love you have written...very beautiful!!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

10 posted 2001-06-03 02:33 AM

Oh that truly kindles old memories for me, what a beautiful love poem. Think I will go open that box and read them over again now!

~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them ~*~

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

11 posted 2001-06-03 11:24 AM

Marge - Thanks, and I think you were right.

inot2b - Thanks for that, I seldom make any sense at all lately..lol

K - Since the poem was about you speaking does the fact that it speaks to you make it parodoxical or does it mean you are talking to yourself?---heh.... Thanks for the song dear

JM -

  Thank you for being one who can be enchanted... glad you like it.

ethome - Thanks, (and I wonder if their is a painting of him lying on the floor with a legless piano?..hmmm)

Kathleen - Gee, Impressed?..Thanks!!

Sharon - I am glad to contribute something that one such as yourself ( with such a wonderful heart) thinks is lovely.  Thanks so very much dear.

Martie - I am well versed in dealing with people having difficulty breathing...let me know if you require assistance..

ps.. thanks for liking it...

Mysteria - Thanks for thinking so.. have fun reading ( but don't forget to make the kleenex handy first)..

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

12 posted 2001-06-03 06:04 PM

Heh...I think it's just cancelled itself out...

~grins~

K

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2001-06-03 07:25 PM

oooh I see changes .....

Like I said Jamie Dear, this is really lovely

Love, sighhhh, isn't it wonderful!

Beautifully written

Maree

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

14 posted 2001-06-05 10:33 AM

K - More like redoubled...heh

MM - ...and so are you dear!!!

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

15 posted 2002-02-18 01:55 PM

...we never did get around to watching the sound of music did we?

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

16 posted 2002-06-01 10:31 PM

No, but we will - via the phone lol. Soon - in about a week...after my essay. Shall we? I still say this is the best one you have written, and I say it without bias my dear friend.

K

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

17 posted 2002-06-01 11:18 PM

We shall.

hmm-- i thought it was reverie-- or polarised

Christopher

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since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

18 posted 2002-06-01 11:36 PM

don't know about polarisation in regard to Julie Andrews, but i do know that you can find some interesting pieces here and there. not your best (though there may be personal reasons for that, admitted

) but not too far off. i like your eclectic use of language in this, as it fits the subject pretty well. tres cool J, glad to see this one that i missed, you write far too rarely to suit me.

C

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

19 posted 2002-07-26 10:33 PM

I love musical dreams. Here's one incarnate and inchoate.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

20 posted 2003-01-18 05:36 AM

Searching for A Moment tonight...found this on the way...

Time moves fast doesn't it dear

K

[This message has been edited by Severn (01-18-2003 05:43 AM).]

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

21 posted 2004-10-07 12:14 PM

unbelievably so tigger

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