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they are losing me......
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they are losing me...... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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they are losing me they are losing me the words flit in then out they are playing games and my muse she slowly strums a flute it simply comes to her to begin adding song to the lyrics that are losing me and thus I have gone beyond repute he read a line she heard a sigh somewhere out and over there a concert of form a line bygoes the norm when one hears the birth of a corm … grow… they are losing me and no one sees no one knows… how those simple little varied lines will glow simple comes in subtle desire I read a line I become fire but nevertheless in my haste, I confess I hurry to write, I then redress each word, each stroke, each so fine a line and ask self, were these mine? were they ever of grand design? or are they simply words of sine…. to be curved in and then carved without a poddling, seed, a winsome doubt a tadpole, fry, of little scheme to grow fruitful, to fulfill all kindred dream to be held, and warmed, a grand origin holds me safely, without the sin but they are losing me the words I would pen in a gift I would give and then yet again I would keep them all so close to vest but ‘neath sun, by wind they would visit, see? as surely as they are losing me |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh my goodness, that's beautiful. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
she slowly strums a flute ~~~~~~~~~~~ Words fail me. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Karilea this is simple Beautiful....love it very much. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
ahh, how utterly delightful and thought provoking..gentle smile |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I am so glad I read this just before going to bed, this was lovely. ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Excellent writing, Sunshine. I like this very much. Poeminister [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 05-30-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a poddling, seed, a winsome doubt... Got me smiling through the frustration here. Lovely and too true, kari!!! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Karilea, Something about this poem, the way it's constructed, the way it "talks" reminded so much of Tennyson. Tennyson's poems so often talk to the reader and that is likely why his poetry still lives on today. This, my friend, was much enjoyed.. Thank you Michael Proust- |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Beautifully done! It has a gentle flowing rythym that carries the reader through the imagery like waves... the crest of each wave being those four powerful words.."they are losing me". And incidentally, I too have often wondered where "my" words have come from as my muse seems to have a mind of her won. lol |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I know this feeling oh so well. Kathleen Blake |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear hesrt, always your writing glows this shines, its truly outstandingly lovely. You are revealing your wonder and inner beauty love and my does it show. Okay it's true I have a decided preference for your brand of wonder but this dear heart is something else. It's really wonderful Take care love and warm stuff Puck  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
okay....ok...I admit have readed this several times because I like it very much.....*s*....and that's why you find one more reply from me here.  ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
they are losing me the words flit in then out they are playing games and my muse she slowly strums a flute it simply comes to her to begin adding song to the lyrics that are losing me and thus I have gone beyond repute ======================= simple comes in subtle desire I read a line I become fire but nevertheless in my haste, I confess I hurry to write, I then redress each word, each stroke, each so fine a line and ask self, were these mine? were they ever of grand design? or are they simply words of sine…. to be curved in and then carved without a poddling, seed, a winsome doubt a tadpole, fry, of little scheme to grow fruitful, to fulfill all kindred dream to be held, and warmed, a grand origin holds me safely, without the sin but they are losing me the words I would pen in a gift I would give and then yet again I would keep them all so close to vest but ‘neath sun, by wind they would visit, see? as surely as they are losing me ======================= my oh my.... someones muse gave the most amazing poetic gift this is a very cool and impressive inspire K.. (IWIHWT) I'm hanging on your every word |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
sometimes the words can lose you, yes, and other times they own your best, and this, my friend, is just that time... what awesome verse with inner rhyme! .... nice job,  ..... to ya! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Honestly, this is awesome. I've been captured for a over a week by a writers blockade, but somehow I don't mind it when I can sit back and relax with a good cup of coffee and read such wonderfully truthful musings. Midnitesun |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
i am at a loss for words here Sunshine for your poetry is truely devine,i love to come here an read all your poems it makes me like i am right at home truely amazing your poetic muse she is |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
May I send this up again just for kicks and jollies? That aside, this is incredible writing and in my opinion, some of your best work. I'm truly impressed. I really mean it. Thank you, Michael Proust- |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
What a convoluted path you take me along from beginning to end, your thoughts flow without effort into a whole which is much greater than its parts. I loved this one, very stylish. Regards Olias. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--oh the twists and turns of the loosing of you have found me with a great big smile...this was awesome! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well goodness, this one just kind of took off on its own... I am glad it touched so many! Thank you all! Karilea |
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