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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-05-29 05:04 PM

It

it
was like a fire
they fueled each other
in desire

intensity
enkindled the flame
producing heat
an inferno it became

an element to excite
begin
as a touch
to invite

a flame
not to destroy
but create
set ablaze
in this state

burning now
heat
without measure
we are now
consumed
in total pleasure

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

1 posted 2001-05-29 05:13 PM

Cool, amazing poem, I especialy liked the rhyme structure and the last verse has one of the most catchy rhymes I have ever read . Realy great poem . Many Thanks .
L.of.L. Tommy .
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'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2001-05-29 05:16 PM

Good litle poem. Joyce

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-05-29 06:35 PM

this flows really well helen. . . you've got it down right. . . and the image is perfect. . .

really good. . .

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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

4 posted 2001-05-29 07:13 PM

nice poem

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

5 posted 2001-05-29 08:04 PM

great poem

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

6 posted 2001-05-30 02:01 AM

Burn, baby, burn. Loved this!

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

7 posted 2001-06-04 01:33 AM

Woo Hoo, cool poem

Enjoyed it

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

kansas-jim
Junior Member

since 2001-06-05

Posts 22
Willits,Ca

8 posted 2001-06-05 09:48 PM

To be the fire you seek. We will be blessed by your passion.

Tovi
Member

since 2001-06-05

Posts 168

9 posted 2001-06-05 10:04 PM

Wonderful emotion in this poem.

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