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Fortressed Shell
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Fortressed Shell |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Tis quiet now in castle keep maiden fair feigns midnight sleep But the breath upon her cheek is not the breath that makes her weak Tis he who lives in castle yon that is the one she dreams upon He who cannot speak her name he who renders blushes flame One day in deepest forest shade they met by chance where river laid Hearts touched then with poetry each knowing it could never be Young Knight was promised to another pledged by the decree of his mother Young Lady thought in her dismay lovers thence should run away Before they could fulfill their dream his promised bride heard of their scheme and brought fate into her possession by making to him, a liar's confession Each word she spoke into his ear each lie burned hot, his heart to sear And whence the last lie lay there spoken evil bride begged a victor's token No pledge did he give to her that day she was shunned and sent away But still the lie of gossip bidden kept his heart and love quite hidden In passing on the village square Gentle Knight and Lady Fair Beneath their lashes quick shy peeks and walking on, neither speaks Years have passed, as they must do and still no word between the two Still silent in their shy constraint afraid to make the first acquaint Each lives in pain of fortressed shell A place where lonely lovers dwell |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
very Arthurian..... good write! i li-ike it!  -Napalm I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ So beautifully sad. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow, this is fantastic. If I believed in reincarnation, I'd think you once lived a different century many centuries ago. Well done, I love the feel/flavor of it. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
OMG! Sharon..All I can say is LIBRARY! You've touched me with this. An excellent work, and even that description does it no true justice. |
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angelbear Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 139North East, USA |
"Each lives in pain of fortressed shell A place where lonely lovers dwell" Excellent poem. I can't control |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Quite a story. Excellently written. Melton |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Scenes from Camelot! I love that old style traditional story telling poetry. You put this together so very well......excellent! |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all so much!! I had some trouble with this one and I'm glad you like the way it turned out.  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Each lives in pain of fortressed shell A place where lonely lovers dwell *sigh* what a wonderful beautiful piece, loved reading it very much. excellent as always ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Oh Sharon, how can a tale so sad be so touching and beautiful?!!!  As always, your poems move me, very well expressed, into my library this goes~Take care, Melissa~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sharon, The beauty and yet sad is so right, your pen is seeping golden words, truly this is poetry at it's very best and a keeper in my works of art file, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sharon this is excellent.... perfect cadecne and the vocab and language are so lovely. Beautiful bittersweet write Well done poetess devine I'm hanging on your every word |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Perfect rhyme I congratulate you! Kathleen Blake |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you have a theme like this. . .and you've got me. . . wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Take a week of celebration-- lower down the bridge cross the wooden plank of hope and pass to forest where hope lives! Let the daybreak be your mass.... and sundown keep your vow and all the time that's left to keep be in the moment, "now". With blessings, m'muse lady! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
"Each lives in pain of fortressed shell A place where lonely lovers dwell" Beautiful writing Sharon Loved it! Maree |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
sigh....beautiful Sharon. lovely writing about the pains of love......sigh... On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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