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Down Into the Rabbit Hole |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Virginia Salter The following was written after watching half of "The Matrix" in the mirror who I am, or who I see? there, the one looking back at me in her eyes I see her stand in the glass a raise of hand on the right as left I see scribe of pen around and deep depth of mind in 3-D glows reaching through to what mind knows  guessing, wondering what is this image there the one looking backing at me in a mindless stare is this the one others can see? is she the one I profess to be?  spinning thoughts streaming dreams looking glass portals to great extremes pulling, pulling with all my might who will be within tonight? and who, without, will be in view when I’m seen by me when I’m seen by you?  ©May 26, 2001 My daughter's here for the weekend!!!  Therefore it would be rude to stay on here all day, so I'll see you late tonight after she retires, if I still have my eyes open.  I will spend a little time here, this a.m. though.[This message has been edited by VAS (edited 05-26-2001).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi VAS, This is great, don't you love it when something just comes flowing in to mind after movies or music ect. and have a great time with your daughter, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I like this. Well done! |
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Siofra
since 2000-09-28
Posts 551State of Suspended Passion |
I like the questions and the thought of mirrors here. expecting an Alice in Wonderland theme, but I got a surprise. enjoyed I am many. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Too good to pass up.  still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the poem ! It draws one back into younger days. Most of all I love how you sum it up! "spinning thoughts streaming dreams looking glass portals to great extremes pulling, pulling with all my might who will be within tonight? and who, without, will be in view when I’m seen by me when I’m seen by you?" Great conclusion! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Thank you all, this surprised me, too, Siofra, it's different than most of mine. And ethome, thank you for the reassurance, I struggled in closing this piece and your words make me feel I succeeded. Isn't it strange how the wind-up for a pitcher and a writer are totally opposite. Cerenity, most of my poems seem to flow onto the page, that is until I try to find the end of them. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Yes, I agree, a great conclusion and flow. Virginia, this is a clever use of a theme, you certainly drew from quite the inspiration. This is the most unique poem that I have seen from you, and I am impressed Take care, Melissa~ |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
i can't comment constructively enough will be back for another read... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A wonderful poem, full of thought-provoking ponderings Virginia ... I really enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
VAS, this is one of the poems in which i wish that i am more articulate to express my thoughts and emotions so that i can write more than the usual "very nice read...well done!!" respond but i will try... i like this stanza very much: is this the one others can see? is she the one i profess to be? been there, felt that...i always want to present a true and honest me yet NOT all of me...a constant challenge for me.. |
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