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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I kicked a rock today And cut my giant toe I stopped to watch the flowers But they didn’t even grow I saw a friend I used to like But she said she didn’t know Anyone quite like me: “A circus freak sideshow” I told my mom and dad I was good and they were glad But then I spilled some soda And quickly they were mad What could I just do Is there even such a thing? That promised it would work out right And end my losing string I sit and often staring The teacher thinks I’m daring To get her heart a racing If she asked I would be sharing That the world is so unjust And I’m filled with wanderlust I think she popped a vessel And I think she even cussed I drew my Uncle Dave With gun and hand grenade Teacher kicked me out of school And I got a failing grade The assignment I only did And I’m just a little kid Take away my innocence And slap the word “Forbid” I kicked a rock today And cut my giant toe I stopped to watch the flowers But they didn’t even grow I saw a friend I used to like And I hit her just for show Is there anyone quite like me And to whom my vengeance owe? it's a true story, they give a kid an assignment to draw a relative so the child draws an uncle who is a soldier and they expel the kid!!! [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-25-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
They expect the men to go to war... and don't know what they are asking for.... |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
eventhough this is someone elses story, it seems as though you lived it yourself. uhh, i guess teachers are cool, but i think kids are cooler. anyways, i like the whole reality thing thats going on in this one. |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
now someone riddle me this.... why do teachers think they have a monopoly on reality? why do people think that because something thus far only exists in your imagination, it's "not real" ? they said it about manned space flight, as i recall, and ~claps hand to cheek and opens mouth~ we do THAT every day..... walt, whoever the kid in question is, let 'em know this: reality is a function of the observer to a large degree, and teachers don't hold a monopoly on it, especially if they don't even bother to ask what your ideas mean.... -Napalm I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
They expel a kid for DRAWING weapons...yet...they are willing to make up all kinds of excuses for these kids who bring guns to school...wheres the sense? Makes you just want to give up... |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Since the assignment can be proven with facts, the teacher and the school are wrong. Good story, good flowing rhythm. Melton |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
love it Walt..as always..  ~Victoria~
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Son told by his teacher to write 5 things he hated. Received phone call because one of the things on the list was teacher's name. Teacher upset because we refused to get mad at son, teacher should of said no names. Her problem not his. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
wayoutwalt,love this poem,keep on writing an i will keep on reading |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
I heard about this one too. Nicely written. |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
oops wrong account yuh [This message has been edited by elisaseyes (edited 05-26-2001).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
hehehe 7 out of 10 Texans woohoo!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Although I havent heard about this.... I really like your poem Walty and the reality behind it. It flowed wonderfully Maree |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Powerful write Walt! Great message a topic needed to be written about. "The assignment I only did And I’m just a little kid Take away my innocence And slap the word “Forbid” More time needs to be spent! |
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