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Soddie in the Wind , One
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Soddie in the Wind , One |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Soddie in the Wind she came by wagon jarred spine teeth clenched smile frozen will resolved determination iced in that 92 degree day in that year of ‘68 skirts dirted, not dusted she faced the wind skys billowing white clouds lending gray to black she looked at him could his determination be any more set to conquer? or at the very least, abide by? under? with? in the arrival he helped her down, swollen by month seven she had survived this far and she started and stared at the soddie, last year’s roof springing summer grass entered into its coolness, its darkness, lamplight lighting the day skins bedding the sheets, willow limbs overhead everything in its place, a table chair and bed, room for the treadle and the cradle she touched his arm his months of work returned to the east set his seed, returned to the west to start, without her, for her, now with her, they would pioneer anew she came by wagon jarred spine teeth clenched smile frozen will resolved determination iced in that year of ‘68 she faced the wind [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 05-19-2001).] |
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thepoeticplumber Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 185 |
What a great depiction of hard life. We have no idea in the world of today as to what pioneers went through. Marvelous job. Roger TPP |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
determination iced in that 92 degree day in that year of ‘68 skirts dirted, not dusted she faced the wind skys billowing white clouds lending gray to black =========================== the imagery and theme of this is wonderful and very creative... I hope we see more of Soddie... well done poetess sun and wind  tis never easy being a moth, |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
These are my favorite years to read about, and you sure didn't let me down in your depiction of sufferace in homesteading. Great job! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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IceNeyes New Member
since 2001-05-20
Posts 9 |
A most intersting interpretation of the individual hardships of the wester migration. Diaries of the women of that time speak very clearly in the same tone. This is very nice. And a real take on a much misunderstood and very brutal time. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ And they perservered ... and found joy in the ripening of new frontiers. Nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Superb description of the life and the resolve of those with courage who came before us Wonderful piece Liz |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
smile frozen will resolved determination iced in that 92 degree day ~~~~~~~~~~~~ I especially like the juxtapositionally opposed phrases. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
she faced the wind skys billowing white clouds lending gray to black ... Exquisite work, my friend... Karilea, My regards, Sudhir |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari dear heart, how utterly perfect this is. You have written an absolutely amazing piece. Here love the first bouquet of the many you deserve Love and warm stuff Puck  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
FANTASTIC!!! historically sound composition it would be a lovely inclusion at any Oregon Trail Interpretive Center, don't you think? I really enjoyed this vivid read! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This awakened such memories for me of stories my grandmother told me about the time in her life when she and my grandfather went to Montana to ranch. In the beginning they lived in a soddie. She had three small girls at the time and was there alone a great deal. They were wonderful stories, as is your poem. Betty Lou Hebert |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you should write books  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent poem, Sunshine... a delightful read! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
excellent. . . the beginning of a tale well told. . . your words are excellent, your characters real, and the feelings are conveyed superbly. . . wonderful my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
as someone who once drove a '68 vehicle, I can relate. Kathleen Blake |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--It is so facinating to think of those times in the past, such hard work each day just to eat and stay warm...thank you for this. I am now off to read the rest. Wonderful writing! |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
so here's where part one was hiding! well *bump* and now off to read the whole series in order..... lovely write btw, and VERY accurate (sadly) -Napalm I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Poets....I doubt that anyone will pick this up to read again, but a note...I have shared the entire ten series of this with several I know who would either pan, or pet, this piece. I have been told to "publish" it. But first you must know....had you not given this the accolations that you have...then I probably would not have gone forward with the series.... which, of course, wrote itself.... thank you all.... |
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