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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2001-07-09 05:30 PM


An act of such small consequence
this dalliance with dreams .
Much fluted talk of things immense
beyond ones' ken it seems .

Or , delicate , that they might leap
to slip by waking eye
the gathered wool of countless sheep
woven in lullabyes .

As pan-pipes play about my head
soft soothing sounds to purify
the wearied lay in feather-beds
in benediction of their sighs
enchanted harps may strike a chord
'til this orchestral serenade
does grant ones' heart a peace restored
collidoscopic notes displayed
fall shimmering in strings of light
while waiting in the wings of sleep
are images restored to sight
harmonic , resonating deep .

A concert stage that's unsurpassed
yet sees so little use ,
when set to page , might it not last
or seem but poor excuse ?

© Copyright 2001 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-09 05:47 PM


I like the play on word of collidoscopic....somehow, it makes all the sense in this world....

of course, then you have to deal with the concept that there is another world....

well done Dr.!

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2 posted 2001-07-09 06:52 PM


As pan-pipes play about my head
soft soothing sounds to purify
the wearied lay in feather-beds
in benediction of their sighs
enchanted harps may strike a chord
'til this orchestral serenade
does grant ones' heart a peace restored
collidoscopic notes displayed
fall shimmering in strings of light
while waiting in the wings of sleep
are images restored to sight
harmonic , resonating deep .

WOW DOC, beautifully written.

"Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh

Dr.Moose1
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3 posted 2001-07-10 06:39 AM


Lady In White ,
Thank you . I find it interesting you picked up on " collidoscopic " . I did four or five re-writes of that line as I was trying to portray the image of the northern lights , not finding  " kalidiescopic " to my liking
I cheated and made that up . Thanks again .
Doc

brian madden ,
Glad you liked . The section you quoted is one of my favorite formats ( iambic tetrameter )I've mentioned before it seems to be the most natural for me to write in .
I was trying to incorporate a sense of the dream state as being seperate from the beginning and the end of the poem ( which I guess worked ) Thanks again .
Doc

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4 posted 2001-07-10 12:36 PM


"collidoscopic"---GOOD WORD. Your wit is so subtle sometimes! And I loved this...lately I have been sleeping like a baby, with dreams so sweet I wish I could record them. "yawning now...hmm..wonder what's playing tonight?" Indeed.  
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5 posted 2001-07-10 02:09 PM


DrMoose~

'Or , delicate , that they might leap
to slip by waking eye
the gathered wool of countless sheep
woven in lullabyes .'


I got a tiny chuckle out of a thought of leaping sheep ...

Great imagery frollicking in this one.

The sheep, the pan-pipes ... oh, very nice indeed !
~*Marge*~



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6 posted 2004-04-28 04:02 AM


enjoyed
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