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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
An act of such small consequence this dalliance with dreams . Much fluted talk of things immense beyond ones' ken it seems . Or , delicate , that they might leap to slip by waking eye the gathered wool of countless sheep woven in lullabyes . As pan-pipes play about my head soft soothing sounds to purify the wearied lay in feather-beds in benediction of their sighs enchanted harps may strike a chord 'til this orchestral serenade does grant ones' heart a peace restored collidoscopic notes displayed fall shimmering in strings of light while waiting in the wings of sleep are images restored to sight harmonic , resonating deep . A concert stage that's unsurpassed yet sees so little use , when set to page , might it not last or seem but poor excuse ? |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
I like the play on word of collidoscopic....somehow, it makes all the sense in this world.... of course, then you have to deal with the concept that there is another world.... well done Dr.! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
As pan-pipes play about my head soft soothing sounds to purify the wearied lay in feather-beds in benediction of their sighs enchanted harps may strike a chord 'til this orchestral serenade does grant ones' heart a peace restored collidoscopic notes displayed fall shimmering in strings of light while waiting in the wings of sleep are images restored to sight harmonic , resonating deep . WOW DOC, beautifully written. "Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Lady In White , Thank you . I find it interesting you picked up on " collidoscopic " . I did four or five re-writes of that line as I was trying to portray the image of the northern lights , not finding " kalidiescopic " to my liking I cheated and made that up . Thanks again . Doc brian madden , Glad you liked . The section you quoted is one of my favorite formats ( iambic tetrameter )I've mentioned before it seems to be the most natural for me to write in . I was trying to incorporate a sense of the dream state as being seperate from the beginning and the end of the poem ( which I guess worked ) Thanks again . Doc |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"collidoscopic"---GOOD WORD. Your wit is so subtle sometimes! And I loved this...lately I have been sleeping like a baby, with dreams so sweet I wish I could record them. "yawning now...hmm..wonder what's playing tonight?" Indeed.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DrMoose~ 'Or , delicate , that they might leap to slip by waking eye the gathered wool of countless sheep woven in lullabyes .' I got a tiny chuckle out of a thought of leaping sheep ...  Great imagery frollicking in this one. The sheep, the pan-pipes ... oh, very nice indeed ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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