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Legends and Time....My 5000th post...
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Legends and Time....My 5000th post... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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In the cool of the eve a light Autumn breeze roamed through a crowd in the park. And the overhead lights shone down through the night warmly replacing the dark. And some folk singer moaned bout his soul and his home and the miseries of the heart. While an old man from the past went round and asked for a cup and some common regard. Oh how the grey sage could look through his age with a smile spread cross his face. And his movements were slow and his words he spoke low with the art of amourous grace. "I need a loan sir I can't go any farther I'm down and broke in this place, but there's a story I tell and if you listen well you'll know why I live this disgrace." Well I just had to listen cause something was missing and I knew this wasn't a lie. I put my hand on his shoulder and passed him a folder and asked him to empty his mind. He said, "can you wait a minute before I begin it I have to draw from the memory vine." He slowly reached in to his coat worn thin and pulled out his bottle of time. With a tear in his eye he began "I once had great friends and planes to fly in I once had a Rolls Royce pride. And I was the best that ever was blessed with a talent to sing songs and write. Now that it's over I've never been sober since I lost the one love of my life. Now that she's gone I keep ramblin on chasing this pain in my mind. "My name is Bob Dallas just a plain southern fella I hail from the state of sunshine. As a boy I got thinkin about writin and singin to people who needed to cry. Cause this thing called a heart could tear souls apart no matter rich man or wise. So somehwere within like whiskey or gin I loosened the ropes on the mind." I wrote about the stars and the blues in the heart and hurt that no one explains. And many discovered that losers were'nt lovers they just lived in a world full of pain. And to search for the truth was a hard thing to do and the news might make one insane. But there's always a beginning after each finish and a chance to start over again" "Well some fellas up north had heard a report of my singing and soothing ways. When they came to see me I thought I was dreaming there was albums they wanted to make. And before I knew it I was on TV to prove it singin songs that I wrote yesterday. It happened so fast more than I could ask and I played on the golden star stage." "I made many recordings and reaped the rewardings of a musical stack of joy. And with that came the fame and a great name for the heart warming skills I employed. Then I met a lady who made me unsteady with eyes that emptied my soul. When her lips clung to mine I spun out of time and my heart beat like a drum roll." "Did you ever love a woman till almost inhuman was the love you had to give? And she'd always be there to give you the care that gave you the reason to live. With a smile so warm and voice full of charm a sweet hosting precious wife. And a mind so fair under long golden hair the total essence of life." "With child she became and the slight of her frame filled up with a miracle thrill. Her days did abound with plans all around I can hear her laughter still. Six months came along and she was put hard strong for the love of her dear mother. So pure was her way and full with no shame I could hardly deny her the bother." "Careful plans had been made that I would convey her to the flight of her mother. But early that day my work poached me away and I drank to one song or another. When it came time to leave I was plagued with unease I'd become sorely unwound. While sluggish I thought I'd not want to get caught out on the freeway unsound." "So my condition I'd defend and called a dear friend to escort my love for the part. And I'd stay behind with low presence of mind to get back to a sensible sort. It was a bright summer day I watched them drive way and thought it the best to retire. While I drifted away way out of the day a foul second took their entire." "My love full of child the friend I beguiled all gone to the fate of bad luck. I was called on the phone from a grisly time zone so caught and horror struck! My selfish inclines toward the secrets of wine cost me the change of the gaurd. Now I was distraught my guts full of knots by seconds they could have been spared." "At such a great cost and with eveything lost to this bottle I've turned for the pain. And from the depths of this hell I never could tell if I was completely to blame. Each time I tried sober my heart would take over so I'd flush the terror away. But time does move on and mine's almost gone as I stand here to show it today." "So let me tell you son there is good to be done look after the things that are real. Because if they're precious you'll never regret it hold on to the love you can feel. Don't preoccupy with the chores of your life and skip past the ones that you love. If you recognize the wealth of that prize you've captured a gift from above." He turned with a reel and shuffled his heels into the crowd and the night. And the cool of the eve with a light Autumn breeze whispered his story and plight. And the dawn of the morn uncovered his form in a silent gazebo grave. While some might scorn the reason he was born his genius will always be played. This is a repost from 11 The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
WOW... what a poem...a tear jerker...CONGRATS on the 5000th post...helen |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
 CONGRATULATIONS |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"But there's always a beginning after each finish and a chance to start over again" "Don't preoccupy with the chores of your life and skip past the ones that you love. If you recognize the wealth of that prize you've captured a gift from above." Applause! Wonderful Eric ... Congratulations on 5,000 posts!  This is an exceptional poem filled with wisdom to mark this milestone ... terrific flow to both your words and story, very well written indeed!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Slick Lady for the encouraging comments.....appreciated! Waseem I'm glad you could take the time to read and thanks for the congrats! Kit it's always a pleasure to hear from you and thanks for such upbuilding comments I sure appreciate them! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Applause me friend...5000th huh..Whew! jwesley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing ethome...way to go...5000 times...James |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very good work.. love the way it unfolds and the story is telling itself... congrats on the 5000th !!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Congratulations on your 5000th post, Ethome...and thank goodness you noted it to be a repost [even if at the bottom] because my sense of deja vu was kicking in and I began to think.... I read too much poetry.... Passions wouldn't be the same without your wonderful creations.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, Never read this one. Wonderful write. Congrats. Sy |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome,de ja vue and ditto Sunshine. Glad you reposted this for your 5000th. CONGRATULATIONS!!!! Me old picnic partner you did good! Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, this is such an intense story, very appropriate for a milestone poem. You tell this story so well, I can see the man, the bottle, the tears in his eyes. Great write. Sandra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your internal rhyme is simply sublime I could read such creations all day!! I lift a toast to your 5000th post - Here's a hearty hip-hip-hooray! *S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well I just had to listen cause something was missing and I knew this wasn't a lie. I put my hand on his shoulder and passed him a folder and asked him to empty his mind. He said, "can you wait a minute before I begin it I have to draw from the memory vine." He slowly reached in to his coat worn thin and pulled out his bottle of time. ========================== "Did you ever love a woman till almost inhuman was the love you had to give? And she'd always be there to give you the care that gave you the reason to live. With a smile so warm and voice full of charm a sweet hosting precious wife. And a mind so fair under long golden hair the total essence of life." ============================ This is CLASSIC Ethome poerty... soul, blues, rhythm, harmony and rhyme, and always with a message of truth and wisdom A perfect poem to mark your milestone post... Congrats on the big 5 E-babes... and it will always need to be said from me... thank you for all the generous, encouraging, replies to my work that make up some of that number...thank you as well for all the song verses you share with me and most of all your friendship. Vantastic dont touch it..but you are   JMWe're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ The sing-song that you share in my heart I will wear Throughout the last-long day For in the telling of a life in dwelling I know it happened that way This is a remarkable piece - Congratulations on setting down a milestone with such soul. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wow, 5007. A milestone indeed. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Congratulations on 5000 + posts Ethome! This is the first time I have read this poem, thank you for re-posting such a classic, strong piece Take care, Melissa~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Congratulations on your 5000th post ethome.. nicely done as always~Victoria~ Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the applause jwesley...much appreciated......have a nice day! James it's good to hear from you and thanks for the 5000 times! Thank Cpat Hair for the comment and I'm glad it unfolded well for you! Sunshine that great memory of yours was kicking in while you were reading this and sure enough you were right! Thanks! Seymour I'm glad you finally got to read this! Thanks for the comments. Hey Keth my old picnic partner I'm glad you dropped in to have a read! Thanks! Thanks Sandra for the comments about the imagery...I'm glad you were a reader that could see all those things! Suthern....I love to write that style with the internal rhyme whenever I can.... glad you were able to enjoy it....thanks! Hey JM my poet pet...thanks for all those soul, blues, rythum, harmony and rhyme types of comments....you're a VANtastic responder...one of the best ...poems and responding! Marge I thank you so very much for the verse and for dropping in to read this piece and for your remarkable words! Interloper thanks for reading and for the comment! Melissa Honeybee I'm glad there was a first time for you to read it and I appreciate your stoping in to do so! Victoria thanks for the kind words and for reading this sad piece. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I loved this when I read it before, Eric...and it moved me to tears again just now as I read it. A wonderful, wisdom packed, perfect "cadance kissed" (stollen from JM) poem! Congratulations on the 5000!! I am so glad you post these wonderful poems at Passions and your replies show a man who really cares. Hugs! |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Wonderful poem!!! Congradulations on 5000th post!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Glad you reposted this one, Ethome, congratulations on 5000th posts! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a classic from the vaults my friend. . . well done. . . and well spoken. . . Congratulations!!!! ----------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
ethome- what an amazing write! Awesome! CONGRATULATIONS on 5000!!! HUGS, ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 07-07-2001).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Martie ...I know the tears would be from such a wonderful heart! Shadow I thank you for your comment. Sven it's good to go to the vault once in awhile just to see if there's anything there that could be improved upon....thanks for the great comments! Thank you Kathleen for the congrats and for taking the time to read this! Paula I thank you once again for the kind and sweet thoughts! Vicky I really appreciate your enthusiasm and the congrats! |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Ethome, A story to be told again and again for all the foolish of heart and with such beauty and wisdom you have done it so very well, congrats on 5000 and I look forward to many, many more. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Cerenity for the very kind words and the congrats...I appreciate your thoughts! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Here I am...late as ever, Eric! CONGRATULATIONS dear poet friend! I have enjoyed your work, and your kind, thoughtful and funny replies...HUGS to you. (yer my buddy!) |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow, 5000!!! CONGRATULATIONS!!! Glad you reposted this one, I missed it in 11.   |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Celeste! I'd rather have you late than never! Thanks! Thanks Virginia I appreciate you taking he time to read this piece!! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
ethome, Congrads on the 5000th post wow... you sure move fast LOL. WOnderful read, you evolve with each post, and you are quickly becoming a fine poet. "Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
with eyes that emptied my soul. When her lips clung to mine I spun out of time and my heart beat like a drum roll." What a lovely description. I love the imagery! Congratulations not only on this milestone but also on this exceptional poem!~Krista "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, totally awasome. Perfect flow, the saddess song, amazing. Congrats on the big one Canuck. Parker |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Ethome, I never did catch this one b4 and I thank you sincerely for bringing it back once more... A fabulous write and ya know I always enjoy reading your poems... Congratz on your 5,000th post sweetie... HugsAlways *~coco~* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Congrats with 5000th and what a way to celebrate this milestone....GREAT WORK!! ((hugs)) Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Brian It's good to hear from you! Thanks for the encouraging words! Smittenkitten I thank you so very much for reading! Parker my fellow Canuck I really appreciate those kind words! Coco I reallt appreciate those kind thoiughts from you and thanks for the congrats! Charisma my dear sweet lady I thank you and I'm looking forward to reading some more of yours! The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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