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The old painting on the wall
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The old painting on the wall |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia 
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Hanging by some threads entwined Upon a wall with view and time A painting sits awaiting Both artist and the brush in rhyme Their etching of a name to find Amongst the colours mating Beauty of a time to see Some images of used to be Remnants of once there The artist hand, a moment caught With desire image bought A treasure now does share The colours blend to almost move The images which ease and sooth How wonderful the gifted Giving life to canvas bare Giving time a gift to share Both heart and feelings lifted The scene serene, the artist making A picture from the mind partaking Canvas yearns attention Every colour true is calling All the rainbow shades are falling With artist true affection Here children play Now passed away? Mortals not forever But in art Which plays its part The strokes of paint are dying never The loving strokes make canvas live To they who seek, they’ve much to give The stokes and palettes many A story of a now past time Told so true with every line Each worth a fortune, or a penny |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
I've never seen a picture painted quite this way....until now.... I continue to be awed by your talents.... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Perfectly stunning piece. Sandra |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
What a wonderful picture you paint, Rick. I look at it in awe.  All writing comes |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
and your poetry is a painting, thus, as well |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rick--You stroke with your brush of words and paint a poem...wonderfully done! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hanging by some threads entwined Upon a wall with view and time A painting sits awaiting Both artist and the brush in rhyme Their etching of a name to find Amongst the colours mating Beauty of a time to see Some images of used to be Remnants of once there The artist hand, a moment caught With desire image bought A treasure now does share The colours blend to almost move The images which ease and sooth How wonderful the gifted Giving life to canvas bare Giving time a gift to share Both heart and feelings lifted The scene serene, the artist making A picture from the mind partaking Canvas yearns attention Every colour true is calling All the rainbow shades are falling With artist true affection ======================= this is EXCELLENT...exceptional writing the rhyme scheme is superbly done...and the touches of inner rhyme added to its cadence pleasures... very cool premise and view from which to write... a poetic melding of imagery and words... artist and poet. impressive inspire, going to keep this one for future ponderings jm We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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shadow974 Senior Member
since 2001-06-21
Posts 636Michigan |
Excelent, like a canvas in time. |
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Ann Member
since 2000-07-07
Posts 64Australia |
this was a lovely poem...you're painting of words is beautiful as any artist's in oil and canvas...best wishes ~ANN~ |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Rick, This poetry carries a deep understanding for not only the artist's interpretation of the current world he was expressing, but for the the actual relationship between soul and eternity. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Here children play Now passed away? Mortals not forever But in art Which plays its part The strokes of paint are dying never ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The only place I would have liked to pause a little longer to absorb the implications in your words was at your final line: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The loving strokes make canvas live To they who seek, they’ve much to give The stokes and palettes many. A story of a now past time Told so true with every line Each worth a fortune... or a penny. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ An extremely good write, presented in perfect meter and rhyme which always holds the readers interest, allowing the message portrayed to be absorbed fully. Ivor The moment created this second, is a moment that's going to last. |
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