Open Poetry #14 |
Painted Vision |
Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
There are mountains too beautiful to see And valleys far too lovely for our eyes. Yet that is where we often want to be: Pure and passionate, untamed and free, Racing through a field beyond our skies In those mountains too beautiful to see. We hunger with a cruel intensity That rips away the smile on our disguise. Yet that is where we often want to be: Impaled upon a painful ecstasy So real that all else seems like whispered lies In those mountains too beautiful to see. But we must sing our lonely sanity And dance among the ashes of our cries. Yet that is where we often want to be: Naked in a room that we would flee, Defenseless in our love, if we are wise. For those mountains are too beautiful to see, And those valleys are too lovely far to be. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is quite a vision. Much enjoyed "Impaled upon a painful ecstasy So real that all else seems like whispered lies In those mountains too beautiful to see. But we must sing our lonely sanity" Specially liked that part Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We hunger with a cruel intensity That rips away the smile on our disguise. Yet that is where we often want to be: Impaled upon a painful ecstasy So real that all else seems like whispered lies In those mountains too beautiful to see. But we must sing our lonely sanity =============================== what a very cool poem... I loved the melodics of this and the imagery and presentation.. but most of all the intensity of the emotions. I had to look around to see if you were peeking in my mind with those verses I put above... Excellent write JL. jm We're all feeding our lonely like it might go away, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Julian~ What an awesome, imaginative write with an equally effective presentation! Take care, Melissa~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Just a beautiful package tied in a bow, was that my Canada Day present? No...well, I am taking it as one, it was breathtaking Mabel! If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Yes, some things are so beautiful to behold that it almost hurts. Well done. |
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