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Exodus Revisited - Part One
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Exodus Revisited - Part One |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Exodus Revisited – Part One advances, which transformed lives by transfers mandated “position, security, dead ahead” so we followed where he was led [should have listened ~ solemn word, “dead”] which led and channeled and primed future’s growth? who’s? theirs…. lowbased economics (dirty 30’s revised) backstabbed plans [thought we were ‘80’s wise] he, thinking I thought CA, still promised land attempted and tried with birds in hand, searched, but restrictions rejected, denied, hell bent against him age wage knowledge blackballed at forty-six ~*~ “let’s go home…” ~*~ my life had disappeared as my childhood had, ‘neath smog, roadhogs and 50’s glad had passed away long ago, dad had died what to keep tied memories were in my head so we said where to be, instead… we followed where economics led and led and led and led how to transport without transition of position a do-it-yourself venture guaranteed… search your mind to find your needs unlike the Joads we were to spend summer in transit go back to when follow trails that all led west now east, the course was best with less sell and sales of treasured keep you don’t treasure treasures? I still weep over a few of have to go possessions hope those owners haven’t lessened in their keep of what was ours nevermind… nevermind rented trailer, rented tow motorhome and kids to go pack it up then pack it in [sold too much, we’re “full to load” thin] don’t forget dog and cat pause to chat with friends who came those we still name good good friends waved us on, heard tears on wind facing the future, yet again [to be continued] |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
All of life is a series of changes. It only matters how we stand up to them. Believe me, I know. The important thing is, I also know you have the strength to carry it forward on that quest...gentle smile, Sissie |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ahhh. . . now I've missed this. . . the explorations of your mind across the planes of time. . . you do it so well. . . so?? where's the next one??? ----------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
interesting chronicles.... in a form which adds to the feel.. enjoyed |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Very intersting and beautiful....Sunshine |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Gads, Karilea! This poem is so sad. There is not one feeling of hope left in here, except the "to be continued" at the end. The poem was very well written. It touches deep emotions, and touching is what it's all about, isn't it? Well done, Karilea. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Karilea, wow the price of happiness.... this was excellent, so sad yet beautifully written. Already looking forward to part two "Like Sand underneath the snow, I make you mine." Kristin Hersh |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Keep um coming, Karilea...you write with your heart!! (PS--that means beautiful) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And where are we off to now? Ifelt sorry about the treasures, and yes, you do treasure treasures! Forward, I am right behind you and loving the trip. If I have made you smile today, then I have done my job! ~* Mysteria *~ |
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