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0 posted 2001-06-29 07:01 PM


When the rains came and washed away,
the sure calamity of your love,
you sputtered and coughed on your mistake,
like a choked child crying out for help.
But when my tears came you didn't need them,
and I could tell.
All the while you were somewhere else,
at the same time,
trying to get back some desperate knowledge,
of how love was supposed to be.
All the while you didn't really love me at all.
Don't
you
see
that  
NOW?
There is no question that we shared passion,
and drank together from the cup of lonliness,
for some short while,
but now
when there is nothing but a drop left,
I believe we are both turning away.
Don't you see,
that the winds wasted their time on our whispers,
because the moments we needed were never to last?
"I love you"
We breathed and fell into each other in such ways,
that would make the moon and night time sky jealous.
Zealously, we labored to feast on one another,
but there were times when the moments weren't enough,
and the impossibilities were raging too much against the speed of our friendship.
Like an 80 mph plummet
down the silky black highway of pain,
the tension continued to pick up.
And then one day I stopped to see your rainbow had faded,
as all rainbows do.
Now I'm climbing back out,
and staring me in the face in yet another doorway.
Will I walk through?
If I walk through,
will I the same impossible grasp of love,
I've suffered twice from already?
Don't
you
see
NOW?
Shhhh...
You didn't love me like you thought you did.
and now I know that.

still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d
I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention.

© Copyright 2001 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
Auguste
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1 posted 2001-06-29 07:08 PM


Oh my...Jennifer, this is a very powerful write.  You've done well with this one.  I'm glad to see you posting again.  

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the human mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

Logan
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since 2001-05-28
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2 posted 2001-06-29 07:10 PM


Always remember, gentle one, there are always different kinds and meanings of love. You explore deeply, and examine closely, and that is good, but don't turn your back on your feelings and become brittle..Very nicely done, which, of course I would have expected as all of yours are...gentle smile
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
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Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2001-06-29 10:27 PM


Jenn, never an easy realization to come to by any means.  Yet, through pain and sorrow comes the blessing of freedom and peace.  They will be yours in time.  Powerful work here.  

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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4 posted 2001-06-29 11:56 PM


Wow Jenn, what a powerful poem, and I am sure many can identify with your writing of the realization of "it's over!", fantastic writing, this is a keeper!

"Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself."
~ Hopi ~

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533

5 posted 2001-06-30 08:23 AM


Painful to read, doubtless more so to write. Ah! But tomorrow!

"Oh what a tangled web we weave when first we practice to decieve"

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2001-06-30 08:32 AM


Wonderful emotional outpouring and the hurt is oozing through all the words and lines....Masterfully written!

"the sure calamity of your love,"
That must have hurt to think and write....
I have to say on the other hand....You kids are complicated these days.....I hope you find the love you need.

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7 posted 2001-06-30 10:20 AM


but. . .perhaps they did. . . just not now. . .  

a heartfelt and deeply moving piece. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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