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Open Poetry #14

hear the cry

corey14
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 89
Boston, Mass, U.S.A.

0 posted 2001-05-23 07:07 PM

at night i think of my love
as she thinks of me
i hear her cry
wishing 2 be with me
im wishing 2 be with her
we are a great match
were togethet

Qumar Fatthi
Member

since 2001-05-20

Posts 59
Pakistan

1 posted 2001-05-24 04:50 AM

nicely write ..............

Ohhhhhhhh Dear !
where the name of LOVE
there must a cry
it will give taste .......
best of luck

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

2 posted 2001-05-24 05:20 AM

Simply put..from the heart..
I have only one suggestion..
Take out '2' and replace them with actual words. It will be taken more seriously that way I think.

corey14
Member

since 2001-05-23

Posts 89
Boston, Mass, U.S.A.

3 posted 2001-05-24 08:43 AM

thanks for that respons temptress i will do that

live a little everyday and when its all over you will have lived a lot

love me and i will love u hate me and i will still like you

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