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Untimely Visit
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Untimely Visit |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ghosts… Those old haunts which Remind me how it is To be left behind Followed me on Twisted turn of bending curve That the road before me lay. Years passed, And specters still show faded Faces split with grin at fairy tales And lies that now float On some current of time To fall in rippling melody Over memories worn smooth Sunlight’s no defense Against the shadows hunting me. Old cemeteries tell stories On tombstones Of all and the nothings Fey indeed… Yet beauty abounds And I repeat old treks With chains dragging [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 06-26-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
a somewhat eerie trek through the mists of time...whispers lurking on the air "worM? smooth" I found I wanted the shadows to be 'haunting' but that may be just because they usually do, if you really want them to be 'hunting' that's truly up to you. I know it still makes sense, and perhaps it's your intention to have it be beyond that which might be expected. I enjoyed the feel of this, but please don't read it in a dark alley or the deep woods. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah, I must quietly argue a bit with Virginia, for shadows do tend to hunt us down when we have not put the ghosts aside... well done, Sir....well done, indeed.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair, Enjoyed the read. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thanks VAS.. for pointing out the typo.. having a heck of a time with the keys today.. as for hunting or haunting..It began as haunting but turned itself into the hunting not through a typo, but through the fact it was and is hunting me... Not intended to be as dark as perhaps it reads, and as for in a dark wood..it was written with the wood and stream so much in mind that it should not spook anyone.... but perhaps me.. Lady... yes, hunting is what it is meant to say.. thanks for the comment!! Seymour... Thank For the comment and hope you enjoyed.. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (edited 06-26-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Yes, hauntingly good write. Personally, I don't believe in ghosts ... much  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Interloper..many kinds of ghosts... some are just images of what was and where we were... Appreciate the comment!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You do your craft well, and I loved this poem. I took it as a personal journey where ghosts are as you make them. Thanks for an excellent read. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ Very effectively written ... very enjoyable read. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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