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The Last of my Kind
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The Last of my Kind |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
It's overcast and dreary Inside of me today A cold air makes me weary Beneath my sky of grey I see my thoughts before me Scattered on the ground Fallen from a dying tree To rot without a sound. My stride is slow and listless My steps are insecure I feel as though I'm weightless No longer am I sure. The rug's been pulled from under me So many times before I've rolled away the carpeting To see the hardwood floor. Beyond this dismal atmosphere, My expectations lie In a place where days are clear And standards will not die Perhaps another universe Unlike this one we know -- Within a space of rhyming verse Where streams of Truth still flow. I'm overwhelmed with solitude Now that I've come to find The reason for my stifled mood: I'm the last of my kind. (Copyright 1993 by: MARK V SHELDON) "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It will be interesting to continue reading your posts, to see exactly what last of the kind you are... enjoying your work very much! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I loved the cadence in this as I crave rhyme.. but I also found the melancholy theme of it part of its poetic pleasures... great use of imagery and metaphor... Lots of expression in this. well done jm I'm going crazy, I'm losing sleep. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
quite a lovely, if melancholy, weave I don't think I can respond more perfectly than Janet Marie, except to say, without a doubt, I'm glad I came in of course, I can tell she is, too, though not specifically said |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you, Sunshine -- keep your eyes, mind, and heart open, and you may catch some inner glimpses. I have many more to share... JM, thank you as well. I tend to be a stickler for form and rhyme since they are both elements which potentially can strengthen the message/expression. VAS, thank you for your response. "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Mark, I am enjoying all of your work, also. I especially like the stanza about rolling up the rug, so it won't be pulled out again. I noticed most of them are from several years ago. Do you have some new ones to share? Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
I do, indeed, Sandra, but all in good time... Thank you for the compliment and observations -- that line you mentioned is one of my favorites too. -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I see my thoughts before me Scattered on the ground Fallen from a dying tree To rot without a sound ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I can relate... Once again Bravo! Connie |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
You write about our humanity so well. And it's so true when one feels hopeless, one thinks that it's the only one feeling that way.Thanks for sharing. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Thank you for the compliment, Walker. I'm just observing and sharing what I've experienced with the hopes that someone, somewhere, may be a little better for it... -MVS "If you think you know it all, you have a lot to learn." |
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