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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2001-05-23 02:12 PM

who’s hooked?

took me
he did
into the calm
of me
centered me
with one look
he the Cap’n
with his
hook
wiggled not
did I,
not a whit
onto his line
I gladly
bit

centered now
by his guile
rendered
now
by might
of smile
and shameless,
now I
for want
of more
willingly
seek but
will not
implore

“nay, Sire
not I
to request
this
familiarity
but if thy
hand
by its own
behest
‘twould find
it’s way
alone,”

while
a smile,
my smile
might find
it’s
winsome
way home

[This message has been edited by Decaflame (edited 05-23-2001).]

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

1 posted 2001-05-23 02:54 PM

I love this and the way it speaks its message.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
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2 posted 2001-05-23 03:15 PM

but if thy
hand
by its own
behest
‘twould find
it’s way
alone,”

To be caught thus, is the best catch. Loved this!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-05-23 03:26 PM

Ahhh, I loved this. Nice writing.

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Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

4 posted 2001-05-23 04:11 PM

This is bittersweet and an interesting perspective. It gives me an idea about something to write. I liked this much.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

JLR
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since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

5 posted 2001-05-23 04:19 PM

Willingly seek but will not implore...enjoyed this much!

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

6 posted 2001-06-03 03:36 PM

while
a smile,
my smile
might find
it’s
winsome
way home
Love is a bait that is always bitten, Decaflame really enjoyed this poem

"difference between love and comfortis that comfort's more reliable and true
Brutal and mocking but always therea crutch for enmity's saddest glare"

Love
Junior Member

since 2001-06-04

Posts 15
All Places Always

7 posted 2001-06-04 05:14 PM

I wonder who is truly hooked herein. A lovely working of metaphor.

[This message has been edited by Love (edited 06-04-2001).]

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

8 posted 2001-06-05 09:09 AM

Oh to be Captain Hook. Well writ

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. Philip Sidney (1554-1586) Loving in Truth

Watersign6
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since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

9 posted 2001-06-06 07:51 AM

very enjoyable

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2001-06-06 08:29 AM

lovely use of language and imagery... enjoyed the read and the message

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

11 posted 2001-06-06 01:29 PM

I am so very glad that this drew in so many wonderful poets....thank you for your replies!

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