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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

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with you

0 posted 2001-06-20 08:15 PM

His shadow falls across my heart
Eclipsing my strength
as tides of remember rise
bringing in all I hoped
had washed up on the distant shores
of I forgot about you
forcing me once again
to walk the beaches
and carefully remove
each fragile shell of recollection
hoping this time
the waves of
I miss you so
Will wash his footprints
Away

~SEA~

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

1 posted 2001-06-20 08:18 PM

Lovely poem, SEA, and so fitting with the your image! *smiles*

enjoyed reading!

~Tier

Kit McCallum

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Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2001-06-20 08:29 PM

So lovely, tender and flowing Susan ... beautiful visuals, very nicely done indeed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-06-20 08:30 PM

I absolutely loved this from the first line.....I thought of shadow falls and waterfalls and the rush of sadness and oh, I just love it!

"This rose has seen red, I have been blue
I'm going to Ireland in 2002!" Kathleen.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-06-20 08:39 PM

How wonderful...you and I are in sync tonight! Well done little one!

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

5 posted 2001-06-20 09:31 PM

"His shadow falls across my heart"

What a lovely line...what a lovely poem.

You've done well with this one. Indeed, very well!

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the human mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

6 posted 2001-06-20 09:38 PM

'to walk the beaches
and carefully remove
each fragile shell of recollection'

What a lovely way to smooth those sands...gentle smile

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-06-20 11:10 PM

SEA~
You know I gather seashells with you~
Lovely, lady.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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8 posted 2001-06-20 11:46 PM

ahh look at me girlie...
working those metaphors and poetic comparisons...
wraping the emotions in imagery and tieing it all up with a bow of sincerety...
beautiful reminisce Susan.
well conceived and written out.

she said I dont know why you ever would lie to me
like I'm a little untrusting when I think that the truth is gonna hurt ya
~MB20~

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2001-06-21 02:53 AM

Yup, those metaphors were awesome Sea...and I could see the picture well, so well done!

~*~ Tell someone you love them today, as tomorrow may never come ~*~

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

10 posted 2001-06-21 06:34 AM

Circe dearest this is utterly truly awesome. You've written a real beauty, as always

I love this, as you knew I would. Absolutely fabulous writing. Imagery, flow and emotions portrayed perfectly. Well done love
Take care
love as always
Mushy

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Michael

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since 1999-08-13

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California

11 posted 2001-06-21 07:31 AM

I love the imagery in this piece. You paint it so beautifully, why would you ever want to forget it?

Michael

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

12 posted 2001-06-21 09:01 AM

Tier~

thank you for the lovely

Kit~thanks so much

Kathleen~ thank you for that bubbly reply

Sunshine~ thank you....we are more often than not I think

Michael A~ thanks, I'm glad you liked this

Logan~ thank you

Marge~ yes, I know, and I'm so grateful

Janet~ aren't you nice

thank you for the great reply

Mysteria~

thank you

Mushy~ I don't get to see enough of you....thank you

Michael~ I do believe that is the nicest reply ever from you, thank you

and...I really can't forget, no matter how I try...

~SEA

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Deep in the heart

13 posted 2001-06-21 04:30 PM

How on earth did I miss this? BTTT

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

14 posted 2001-06-21 04:52 PM

This is fantastically said! We do so often wish we could erase that which has caused us pain or loss...yet our memories serve an awesome purpose...to grow us wisdom...to grow us heart.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

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with you

15 posted 2001-06-21 04:58 PM

Interloper~ I don't know

.....thanks for reading though

VAS~ thank you.....

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2001-06-25 04:27 PM

Excellent poem, SEA!!! This one aches... beautifully. *S*

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

17 posted 2002-03-24 12:10 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, may true love forever eclipse upon your heart and fill your heart with a full moon of magic and awe! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is spellbinding! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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