Open Poetry #14 |
Outwalk The Rain |
Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I can't outwalk the rain or the pain your leaving left me with. The tears on my face, or is it rain, brings me to my knees. Can't you see? I'm nothing without you. I can't outwalk goodbye Is it the wind that makes me shiver? Or the silence you left behind? I can't outwalk the love The one you left behind Forever. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Then walk faster...like I have room to give advice. Nicely done. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know what you mean Paula...wish it didn't have to be that way...but sometimes it is...all we can do is get soaking wet and look for new dryer opportunities..umbrella's help....James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Well written, indeed!!! Regards, Sudhir |
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Rain Junior Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 21Atlanta, GA |
Painful emotions. A wonderful flow to this. |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
The rain and a lover leaving are both big drips. One leaves you soaked on the outside, the other with a big sobbing heart on the inside. Find someone with two big arms to gently wrap you up and dry you out. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JLR...lol girl...walk faster...cute...ypou give good advice...you just dont listen to it goof... LOL James...oh you...it was just a thought that came to me yesterday as I walked in the rain...I could see it coming and was trying to keep ahead of it...didnt work hehehe Sudhir...thank you sir, I always value your words Rain...thanks inot2B...very sweetadvice...two strong arms...nice thought...thanks |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Iffen ya' don't have a fella~ Make do with an When the rain is coming - you can try to outrun/outwalk it ... or stop and splash in the puddles ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 05-27-2001).] |
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angelbear Member
since 2001-05-22
Posts 139North East, USA |
"out walk the rain" I like that a lot great poem. I can't control |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula, Beaut poem, I'm with Marge If you can't outwalk the rain or pain...have some fun. Splash a while! Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"I can't outwalk goodbye Is it the wind that makes me shiver? Or the silence you left behind? I can't outwalk the love The one you left behind Forever." I really love those lines Paula! They're from the pain and sorrow element and they put the point across so well!! |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
"I can't outwalk the love The one you left behind Forever." I do hope it's not the case, Paula . Well-done. - James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula sister mine, beauty and brains love, you have them both. I love this as smooth a flow as I've ever seen love. Absolutely fabulous. And now love come and jump in the puddles with me, we can have a splashing time. Take care love as always Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Marge...I love splashing in the puddles...I take my bower out walking and we both play...thank you angelbear...you are sweet to say so thank you Kethry...I intend too...thanks sugar ethome...oh I am so glad you liked this...hugs to you sweet poet man jamesjiao...no...just a thought that came to me walking in the rain... Marsha...Im so ready to go puddle jumping...lets get marge and Keth and PT and gooooooooooooooooooooooo |
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