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Allison's Tears
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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mystery of a Goddess birth-- one spring night it all began a reckoning of storm emerged. with swirl of spoon on supper's stove-- somewhere above, the Gods did hear clouds in Gulf of Mexico. So all the vapors rearranged and swirled with magick of a spoon each tear she cried became monsoon. it's true, we saw a goddess birthed to at last eat words we spoke when at last the water broke. how her tears ran river's trail. Thus her storm became undammed... on and on and on she ran. across the southern ghost procured filling creeks and rivers kept a torrent in a woman--wept. bled from the skies in nature's cry... Again, again, she could not stop. Nature spun a sorrow's top. she wept upon a mighty boast where they'd never seen such rain-- "How can one woman feel such pain?" that even I am left amazed. I, olympic cryer, sure. Alive and dry--I think I'm cured. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-19-2001).] |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
Phew!!.............a rather wonderful hurricane and tidal wave of poetic force to be sure........I like so many of these verses....I think I'll go and rest on the breeze ............you've conjured. Jon [This message has been edited by Jon Mewett (edited 06-19-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Ah, but the serenity after storm's spin Gave her new life with scratch of your pen Tears in rage spent in the notion Allison's regrets cried an ocean *Glad to hear you are okay love. This is wonderfully written. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nice imagery and telling of a tale which weaves the mystical, to the present, to the personal.. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
With tears comes release, a chanel for the pain. Your words are a Tsunami of power and emotion. Allison? She cried for days, that even I am left amazed. I, olympic cryer, sure. Alive and dry--I think I'm cured. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
So you were up in the middle of the night again, eh? Sorry I didn't see your reply to my post 'til now. This is quite unique, K. I especially love the way you ended it. I think I have been quite the Olympian myself at times. Glad you found a cure.  Michael |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
A gathering of universe it's true, we saw a goddess birthed to at last eat words we spoke when at last the water broke. I loved your words and your imagery and the emotions this piece brought forth. Regards, Olias. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a unique view of it all. . . but then again, I've come to kind of expect that from you. . .  great job. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: i don't know who you're writing 'bout but i saw a goddess birthed, no doubt, when i read the first verse posted by some queen of harp, there's no deny i surely don't no allison and know not why they call it sin to cry like marathon's embrace since after all, this is no race i don't know allison, but friend, i wish this pome would never end, her tears are mine, i'm laughing, too, and both i'll do when i meet you *wink* loveditharpo |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent!! Now you know we'll expect a 'hurricane' poem from you everytime strikes right?  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am running behind again! Jon--thanks so much for reading! I'm so glad you enjoyed! Mom--yep, we're okay, there are many who were hit hard, and it's going to be a long hurricane season this year--but thanks for the good wishes, love ya much! CH---thanks for noticing the little weave in there. My gratitude for reading! Brian...not the first time I've been called a Tsunami--but I don't think the first time it was meant as a compliment..lol, so thank you and hugs. e ya soon (pc probs) Michael--it's always good to see ya here! I appreciate your taking the time to read, and I do mean sincerely that I've learned so much just from reading your work! Thanks! OLIAS...haven't seen ya for abit, good to hear from you! Thanks (and how's the music going?) doreen, doreen...lol, this was my tribute to the storm that wouldn't quit! Will have to catch up when I can--I am pressed for time again these days...sigh... PdV--can't guarantee a post for every storm--but this is one that we will not soon forget. Thanks always, s.o.s. Thanks to all, I had fun writing this one! You people make it a joy! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I do love that bit about olympic cryer... even if I hated being hit by the deluge! *G* This is great, serenity... Now send the next one elsewhere for its sobfest! LOL |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
suthern? was hoping you'd find this! You inspired a few of the lines here yanno! I thought of you that week--hope you are well and drying out. Sometimes, "drying out" can be just as tough, if not more difficult than the storm! HUGS lady! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
All I can say is WOW, and the more I read your work the more I learn...by the way I am still laughing about your comment about the butterfly "hauling ass"! You are very funny! "Lose your temper and you lose a friend; lie and you lose yourself." |
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The meek Junior Member
since 2001-06-22
Posts 16Australia |
Excellent, thouroghly enjoyable. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
this is supreme writing... Regards O Serene One, Sudhir "I was born intelligent - education ruined me" |
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