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The Forest For The Trees
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The Forest For The Trees |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
The mighty oak whose branches soar great heights above the forest floor full aged of more than fifteen score soft whispers of those days of yore The smooth gray branches of the beech with limbs out-stretched beyond my reach your wisened visage I beseech "Have I not passed this way before ?" The hemlocks bark without a sound 'midst filtered sunlit hallowed ground by no means lost I've simply found again one place I can't ignore This child whose wonder's been set free to see the forest for the trees |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You amaze me---I was just telling a friend that I considered you one of the hardest working poets at passions! And do tell...this is a sonnet, yes? What's the form? What's your secret?  ...and where can I get me some muse juice? Do I need a prescription, Doc? LOL...seriously, I loved this.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DR, Now your talking my kind of rhyme. Enjoyed |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Set the tone with metronome... Enjoyed! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
serenity , I am truly flattered , but no , I don't believe this is a sonnet . It has the fourteen lines ( three quatrains and a couplet ) but is done in iambic tetrameter . Thank you for the compliment , no secrets , just an overwhelming desire to write , that's the only prescription . Doc |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent sir! You are not re-treading old tires.... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wonderful rhyme. "Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent rythum and rhyme scheme! I love the message, it's wonderfully insightful and all should take heed! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sy, Thank you kind sir , who would've thought that someone from " Tamarac " would have an affinity for trees ? Doc Sunshine , I've got to admit this meter is one of the easiest for me to write in ,it seems to flow more naturally than most . Thank you . Doc PDV, Again , my thanks . Always looking for a fresh perspective . Doc brian madden , Something just a little different . Don't know why I picked up the " A" rhyme in the 2nd and 3rd stanza , it just seemed to fit. Thanks . Doc ethome , Many thanks . These are the fun ones to write, where nothing seems forced and because of that everthing just falls into place . I would say that this probably took less than ten minutes and is one of the few I've done without any re-writes . I did not expect it to get so much positive feedback . Thank you again . Doc |
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Fancy Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 189TN/USA |
...this seems to flow so naturally...as if you were lying on the forest floor letting these thoughts and feeling freely flood your mind....it moves me.... Fancy |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Fancy , Thank you , whenever possible I try to take a nice slow walk in the woods to try and re-connect( nowhere near as often as I'd like ). Welcome to Passions . Doc |
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