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Open Poetry #14

inspired by "Crumbling"

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2001-06-15 10:57 PM

Of old loves, faded
my empty hallway echoes
and mortar crumbles

through doors wide open,
each room's emptiness profound,
the loneliness sounds

[This message has been edited by Krawdad (edited 06-15-2001).]

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

1 posted 2001-06-15 11:09 PM

echoing... very nice yuh

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

2 posted 2001-06-16 01:38 AM

very nice writing kraw..i like a lot

hugs, g

the boy said, my name's johnny
and it might be a sin
but i'll take your bet
you're gonna regret
i'm the best there's ever been!
-cdaniels

Poeminister
Senior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

3 posted 2001-06-16 01:55 AM

Krawdad--I like these, nicely written.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

4 posted 2001-06-16 02:05 AM

and those
sounds
that echo
here
are the
ones that
ring too
clear
such as
footsteps
that walk
away
even when
we pray they
stay
it’s just
this thick
fog of
brown
in this
crumbling
that I
drown

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare

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