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Martie

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0 posted 2001-05-22 11:47 AM

Looking for the Wild

I was climbing the crest of the hill
looking for wildflowers,
the cool breeze at my back.
A perfect patch of wild iris
were caught in dappled light beneath my feet.
I zigzagged to avoid a crushing blow
to such tender,
when from the ground just steps away
three golden eagles exploded,
their chocolate wings blocking the sun.
Away, away, across the blue
I watched my heart,
as the lake lapped at the shore
in the same quiet minute of my awe.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-05-22 11:48 AM

Ah, she's back, and she comes in so quietly in the explosion of feathers....

Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

2 posted 2001-05-22 11:58 AM

Oh, mesmerising work, indeed!!!

regards Martie,
Sudhir

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-05-22 12:16 PM

oh how very very cool...
and look how few words it took for you to define the picture for us in our minds...
tell tale sign of a gifted writer is successful succintity...
and you did and are both

WELCOME BACK GIRLIE!!!!!

missed your kindess and poetry around here!!

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

lunatic
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4 posted 2001-05-22 12:23 PM

Wonderful imagery.

Moonstruck

RMW
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5 posted 2001-05-22 12:39 PM

Martie....Outstanding! Bob

S Arthur Grey
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woven by a poet's loom

6 posted 2001-05-22 01:56 PM

and you found it!
a heart jumping picture, Martie.
thank you

S Arthur

. . . Hills jump with brooks.
trees tumble out of twigs and sticks;
e e cummings

Irish Rose
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7 posted 2001-05-22 03:06 PM

A beautiful verse in English I can understand!

What a refreshing read...thank you, Martia.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Auguste

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By the sea

8 posted 2001-05-22 04:35 PM

Martie,

Just the right amount of imagery, my friend.

I can relate to this one, as I used to spend a lot of time hiking the forests and would often disturb a flock of birds and watch as they took off like a dark cloak being swept across the sky. I enjoyed this much and am so happy to see you back.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

suthern

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Louisiana

9 posted 2001-05-22 05:18 PM

With a nod to JM, I've never been successful at being succinct. *G* But that doesn't mean I can't appreciate what I can't do! LOL This is beautiful, Martie... thank you for the vacation from my office! *S*

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

10 posted 2001-05-22 05:47 PM

lovely, Martie

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2001-05-22 06:36 PM

Martie,
Love the flowers of your mind. *L* Sy

Martie

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12 posted 2001-05-22 08:19 PM

Hi all...I wish I had had (can I say that?) a camera, for it was a wonderful moment for me. I'm glad I could write it so that you could see a little of what I saw. Thank you for all your lovely comments...I missed you!

Denise

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13 posted 2001-05-22 08:43 PM

Very beautifully done, Martie!! Welcome back! You were missed!

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

14 posted 2001-05-22 08:54 PM

Martie~
Welcome back home, Sis!

What a poetic retreat your trip must have been.
Thanks for the More-Than-Kodak Moment !
*BIG HUG*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Dark Angel
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15 posted 2001-05-23 03:17 AM

Welcome back Martie

This is beautifully written Martie and the imagery is excellent!

I loved it!

Maree

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16 posted 2001-05-23 04:20 AM

Beautiful picture and setting, welcome back Martie. I could almost feel like I was there!

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~
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JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

17 posted 2001-05-23 05:52 AM

Very nice Martie..James

brian madden
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ireland

18 posted 2001-05-23 04:16 PM

I zigzagged to avoid a crushing blow
to such tender,
when from the ground just steps away
three golden eagles exploded,
their chocolate wings blocking the sun.

An amazing scene. beautifully penned. God where is this piece Heaven you describe?

"across the unfair divide
where black will never meet white
so read my token lips
like they never exist"

nicky wire

Martie

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19 posted 2001-05-23 04:21 PM

Brian--it is a place in California in Trinity county on the Madd River. I will send you a photo if you like.

Watersign6
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Hurricane,WV

20 posted 2001-06-05 08:15 PM

i am enjoying all your poems so much

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