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Shooting darts in the empty sky...
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Shooting darts in the empty sky... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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Vertigo feel in silent rhapsody, I can't even think what I mean to say, Confusion reigns like vain futility, I can't even search my meaning today. Sanity has left its shores, edges frayed! I am in an advanced stage of retard, Unsheltered, unable in being staid, I am my own miniature reward. Why walk? Where do we go? Where from? Where to? Why talk? Where is the goal? How come? What for? Why baulk? Where is the next cringe coming from? Why stalk? Whose shadows do we try to hound? The whys have me in abject surrender, I am in the presence of wheres and whats, The hows think of me as a pretender, I seem to fight with ghosts in my closet. Just then the horn screams out to egg me on, The train blares and my body rushes front, That there is some useful work to be done, Comes a thought that derails my ghostly hunt. :: |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sudhir....looking for a line that touched me more than the others... can't do it... they all stand alone reaching for one another... wow... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
shoot those darts in the poems, Sudhir, it's the perfect place for a bullseye. Kathleen Blake |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Oh, this is amazing! What a write!  Sauni Sauni :) |
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Morgoth Junior Member
since 2001-05-21
Posts 26Baltimore, MD |
A lot of the same questions that I ask. Well done. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, These are words that have haunted me all my life. Good write. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
The title was a poem unto itself. Such a wonderful job on this one. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir, my friend~ I think we all face these questions in our lives ~ Sometimes we're the dartboard - sometimes the dart ! 'That there is some useful work to be done, Comes a thought that derails my ghostly hunt.' Be the dart !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OH YES wonderfully written |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you very much, Karilea, for your words Kathleen, it is, isn't it? I will try to shoot darts here. Thanks a lot for coming by Sauni, How have you been lately? Thank you so much for visiting. Morgoth, Firstly, welcome to passions and many thanks for reading. Seymour, Thanks a lot for your response. After memories, words are the ones those haunt, aren't they? Julian, that a mighty good compliment, and I appreciate your words a lot. Thanks a lot. Marge, Thanks for the hugs and the response. I am aiming to be the dart Paula, Many thanks to you. Regards to all, Sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed your poem Sudhir...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
James, I am glad that you enjoyed this one... Thanks... Regards, Sudhir |
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corey14 Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 89Boston, Mass, U.S.A. |
good pome keep writeing |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Sud, this is excellent...I loved the cadence and flow of this one... the way you picked up the tempo to emphasise the building frustration.. very cool, clever and creative writing poet sir  We wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--Hi..what a well done poem...so full of complex questions that are so human and real...and you are the answer, my friend. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
corey, thank you for coming by... and welcome to passions Janet, my friend, thank you so much for your cool response... so glad that you liked what you read... Matie, the answer, my friend, seems to be right there, just to need to search a bit better... thank you so much Regards to all, Sudhir |
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