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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2001-06-14 05:32 AM

Now we take
the tabliture---
words of wisdom
etched in stone
written by
the hand of God
and break them
to make them our own.
Every piece a puzzle--fits..
every jagged edge of grit
every thought an unlit wick...
potential flickering of home.

All the laws of universe,
within--without--a dance, perverse...
A silhouette
in pirhouette
shadow of myself, alone.

and the memories unwind,
un-done by one
in silent lie
as the memories unfold
grant reprieve
from stories told.

Dance with me
in candlebox
behind the door
we're free of locks
etching glass in smoky dread
life--defiant of the dead.

IWithinYou
Junior Member

since 2001-06-14

Posts 21
Within You

1 posted 2001-06-14 05:54 AM

A very interestng read. Especially as Defiant is not only a favorite word, but also a term used by others to describe...

Quite enjoyable. Please do not stop at one thing Defy most everything in this conjured OZ-like, want you to belive to buy-wonderland.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2001-06-14 06:13 AM

                "words of wisdom
                 etched in stone
                 written by
                 the hand of God
                 and break them
                 to make them our own.
                 Every piece a puzzle--fits..
                 every jagged edge of grit
                 every thought an unlit wick...
                 potential flickering of home."

Yep! we do!   Your'e writing better already now that you're a year older!  Great poem Celeste!

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

Watersign6
Senior Member

since 2001-05-25

Posts 823
Hurricane,WV

3 posted 2001-06-14 09:10 AM

this is really great

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2001-06-14 09:18 AM

Serenity....this is awesome!

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

5 posted 2001-06-14 10:05 AM

Quite an enjoyable read, this!

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

6 posted 2001-06-14 12:14 PM

WOW!!!

Regards O Serene One...
Sudhir

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2001-06-14 12:17 PM

you write so often how I feel..huggss

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

8 posted 2001-06-14 02:12 PM

and the memories unwind,
un-done by one
in silent lie
as the memories unfold
grant reprieve
from stories told.

SOunds like your birthday was one hell of a party..seriously. A powerful write, amazing flow and energy to this verse.

"Build a man a fire, he'll be warm for a day. Set a man on fire and he'll be warm for the rest of his life". Terry Pratchett

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

9 posted 2001-06-14 10:37 PM

serenity,
Intriguing . A moth to a flame , dancing perhaps too close to the fire . To me this speaks of things deliciously forbidden , the more so sweet . Fleeting images conjured from another time . Excuse my ramblings .
Well done .
Doc

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