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Hear Me Sing
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Hear Me Sing |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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the magic of a song from beginning to its end you can form a lover from once was just a friend I've been in love forever waiting in the wings while other poets wanting of songs they can sing this time I jumped in first heartfirst, unafraid I let you know at once how long my decision has been made I cannot recall before there was you inside my song I don't think I could even sing and if so I did it wrong I gained my voice inside for you the desire, eternal sprung and in the wings I fell to earth your beauty was always sung it's grand how a song can join hearts that were two the music is now fading never was dissuading hear me sing how I love you [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-14-2001).] |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
Hey man, whacha thinkin'? this looks short and simple but i find a lot of heart in it! I especially like the thought and feeling of: I've been in love forever waiting in the wings while other poets wanting of songs they can sing I also like I gained my voice inside for you the desire, eternal sprung and in the wings I fell to earth Your beauty was always sung Its just an awesome visual and thats what crazy readers like. uhuh. nice thoughts |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very nice write, Walt. I can see your heart in this one and it is beautiful.  All writing comes |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
really love this one Walt  |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
the transition from the beginning of this message to the end is so well done, so finely crafted to show the transition within you  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh Walt! This is magnificently beautiful!!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ If I were to find this verse on a card ~ 'the magic of a song from its beginning to its end you can form a lover from what was once just a friend' I'd buy a dozen ! ! May I suggest that you go to www.bluemountain.com and submit it ? At the very bottom of their opening page there is a link for submitting poetry. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
I've looked it up and down searching for where I like it best.......I think I simply like it all........ It's really very nice Thank you *********************** It's only me.......only me |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Echoing Marge..... |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
WOW- I loved, it sang and flowed with sincerity and from the heart, very nicely done. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh....enchanting song... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Echo #3 - I think also you should definitely try submitting this somewhere (like Marge suggested), and if there cards I too will take a dozen (I like pastal colors - lol!) Lovely, just lovely, I kept this one! ~*~ Remember to tell someone today that you love them as tomorrow may never come ~*~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you all so much |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
This is so moving. Personal and intimate. |
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