Open Poetry #14 |
An Angel Gets Her Wings |
Cheryl Flemming Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 102 |
As I sit under This big oak tree A little girl Approaches me With her clothes torn and tattered Her eyes filled with tears and pain She says can you please help me As it begins to rain I am trying to find my mommy and daddy They had to go away But they promised before they left me They wouldn't be far away They said when I look up to the heaven's And see the shining stars That they would be watching over me Wherever they are I began to cry As we looked up to the evening sky I pulled her close and said Your mommy and daddy didn't lie They have gone to heaven Not far away And you will all be Together again someday She wrapped her arms around me And held me so tight She whispered soft and gentle I'm going to be with them tonight I closed my eyes and dried my tears And when I opened them Two angels appeared We've come to get our baby And take her to heaven Today our little angel Got her little wings. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Very touching. Melton |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
This is quite beautiful, Cheryl. I enjoyed it very much. Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very tender write. All writing comes |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
I think this has a poignant story to tell, but I got lost somewhere. It's very powerful, but I wanted to be drawn in a little more to the story. Would you mind elaborating to me via email? [email protected] Thanks........ You're writing is very clean I just think I'm missing something (smile) Like there is another story underneath what you are trying to communicate. |
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Cheryl Flemming Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 102 |
Thank you 2dalamit and Tovi for your sweet reply. Lone Wolf I see you are from Michigan.I am about 45 minutes from you.Thank you for your sweet comment Redwriter1 Thank you for reading more into the poem.You are right there was more to this but never had anyone ask me about it.I had just revised it from its original version. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
What a truly beautiful piece of writing. Such sadness was portrayed in your words. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cheryl, Good write, enjoyed. |
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