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Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-05-21 07:28 PM

*Gallery Lecture Hall*

when I write,
what happens?
do the words flow
from my heart
as easily as they do
from my pen?

or, do I hold back a little
wondering what you'll say?
wondering if my words
will speak to you
the way that I want them to?
or
if you'll just totally
miss the point

and,

if my words do speak to you
why?

what have I touched
in your heart or soul
that makes you respond?
what in my life can you
relate to when I tell
you my stories in rhyme
my songs in time?

or,

do you just like the way
the words fall on the page?
the way that the
nouns, verbs,
subjects, predicates,
past and present participles
flow together to make
streams of words
that flow over your soul
and wash it clean?

well, I don't know what it is
but I hope that when
you read my words
that you can see
what's really behind them. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

1 posted 2001-05-21 08:18 PM

Written words are sometimes more powerful than spoken ones. Lovely!

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

2 posted 2001-05-21 09:10 PM

what have I touched
in your heart or soul
that makes you respond?
what in my life can you
relate to when I tell
you my stories in rhyme
my songs in time""

Sven,

I have only been here a short time, but can say with honesty that your writing is true and spoken from your heart. with each writing I read I can relate some part of my life to your words that fall across the page...with your touch of class, and style..

hugs to ya

Lauren~

***

Nothing Beautiful In This World
Is Ever Really Lost
All Things Beloved
Live on In Our Hearts...Forever."

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2001-05-21 09:16 PM

I read your words
I hear your tone
I see behind
I love your poem

Titia

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-05-21 09:29 PM

Behind every gift, it's the thought....

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

5 posted 2001-05-21 09:33 PM

Sven...there is such humility to your poetry. Sigh. Well done. Bob

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

6 posted 2001-05-21 10:04 PM

Hi, you know, I can feel the confusion in your mind here, I feel like I relate to this a lot, because my poetry is always so overly personal. And you wonder how others take it. But you should know, your words always seem perfectly wonderful, and I think very understood.
Sandra

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-05-21 10:54 PM

Ok, I give up, what's behind them!!!!

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Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

8 posted 2001-05-21 11:46 PM

I think your words are clearly understood and the meaning behind them. Because you write so well, it's easy to feel what your heart feels and mind thinks. This one is great.

Sauni

Sauni :)
Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak
I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

9 posted 2001-05-22 12:25 PM

Perhaps the reason I read everything you write...is because so often what I see is myself. The part of me that will at death still dream of love even if I am no longer able to write of it.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

10 posted 2001-05-22 01:29 AM

Oh, yes, Sven, the perfect goal, that the reader will see what's behind the poet's words.

btw, did you find the poem I wrote to your cliché challenge?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2001-05-22 03:48 AM

I can relate Sven...I suppose that's why we read some and connect and others and move on...you know like shared desires, feelings, interests and experiences...James

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

12 posted 2001-05-22 05:25 AM

Sven,

I relate very well to this, my friend. I write to let others know that my feelings are so much like their own. We all hurt, love, feel... I write mainly to let others know that no matter what their circumstances in life there is always hope. I'm not talking about the silly "every cloud has a silver lining" stuff. I'm talking about the real thing. Embrace life and it will embrace you. You've done well here and your honesty speaks volumes about your character. I especially appreciate this one and offer my thanks.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2001-05-22 06:27 AM

I can

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

14 posted 2001-05-22 01:07 PM

Remember the paintings of people that seem to be looking at you no matter where you stand in a room. Well, that is what your poetry does. It's like you reach in and take a small piece of my soul with your words. Is it because you are so good at what you do or maybe something more sinister.
Only SVEN knows!

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

15 posted 2001-05-22 05:52 PM

I like to think I see the poet behind the words, but not just one aspect..In one word sometimes there are a million complex things..and sometimes the words carry only their one meaning. Either way, misread, I think a poet gets annoyed by it, so we're never really pleased! LOL! So..anyways. Listen to me ramble on YOUR poetry time!

So..WHY? BECAUSE...Does that help?
ROTFL! Well..you write so well I forgot to say..I LOVE THIS!

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Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

16 posted 2001-05-22 06:02 PM

Thank you all so much for reading. . . and for your words. . . you've really surprised me. . . I'm so glad that you all can take something away with you from my writing. . . I used to think that only I could understand the things that I wrote about. . . I see now that it's not like that. . . that, while everyone may not understand what I write. . . they can relate

Thank you all again my friends. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

17 posted 2001-05-22 08:14 PM

wow!...i loved this poem...and it is what poets can relate to...as what comes from your words touch people in different ways words cant express...as when i read your poems...i see your heart...filled with caring and loving that protrays much beauty through words...i enjoyed this poem greatly...as always...thanks for sharing it sven

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

18 posted 2001-05-22 09:41 PM

hmmm...what is it about Sven's poems that I like....soft, gentle, caring, loving, kind, picturesque, 'from the heart' writings, yep, that's what I like about Sven's poems!

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

19 posted 2001-05-23 09:15 PM

Sven - I was at a loss for words when I read this writing, as I was so very touched by it. But then it came to me my friend. You, are the heart, not only of you, but the many that are here. And you write words of caring, because you are the caring. You write words of tenderness, because you are the tenderness. Sven, I could go on and on, but I think that you get the point. A more gracious writer I have never met.. And I am honored to be your friend.... Email me anytime, about anything, and I will respond..

Your friend,
BC

ParisGrl
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 610

20 posted 2001-05-23 09:55 PM

John,

I loved this poem. What is behind words......emotions. Great writing my friend.

Take Care,
Laura

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

21 posted 2001-05-24 02:57 PM

i have always enjoyed your words sven...keep writing always...

~Victoria~

Every child is an artist. The challenge is to remain an artist once he grows up.

Pablo Picasso

angelbear
Member

since 2001-05-22

Posts 139
North East, USA

22 posted 2001-05-24 04:23 PM

Loved this as well. I still often ask myself do how much of the words do I write and how much of the word writes me?...great thoughts in this poem.

Until you are are near it, you will never see it, until you live it you will never know it...this is why we must not judge it.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

23 posted 2001-05-24 09:14 PM

Again, thank you all for your words. . . I'm honored to share with all of you. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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