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Unlimited Journeys (please read!) |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
If I die this very moment, I would not fret, for I have never felt, so complete, so content. I have felt your presence on me, I vanish in your kiss, so if I die this very moment, there'd be nothing here to miss. We are now forced to part, our pain is mutually felt, so if I die this very moment, no more troubles shall be dealt. I hear your heart scream, its too hard to open my eyes, but if I die this very moment, promise me not to cry. I wouldn't want to leave you, but being apart is just the same, so if I die this very moment, please dont fill your heart with pain. No one can hold back your visits, unlimited journeys to my grave-side, so if I die this very moment, I know our love is always alive. |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
love is powerful and death is certain but hopefull not for a long long time if we are lucky,this is a really good poem and i cannot critique you on any of yours because i am new here and also dont know a whole lot about poetry form etc.. all i can do is give my opinion and it is that you write really well and i am enjoying yours  |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
WATERSIGN!!! Youa re my hero!! Thanks so much for the support... all my work is from me thinking of my boyfriend and whatnot... he means the world to me!! Thank you SO much for enjoying my work so much! You're my #1 fan!! Keep reading |
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