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Sometimes I Feel (please comment)
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Sometimes I Feel (please comment) |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
Sometimes I feel happiness outside in the air free-falling from the world bothered by no one Sometimes I feel anger want to scream, want to kick "those stupid boys" (they can't understand me) Sometimes I feel butterflies is it love? I can't call it love, until I know it's love I don't want to come out of it Sometimes I feel sickness like a bat to the stomach I lay there gripping where it hurts "why me? why me?" Sometimes I feel the space the distance between two crossed hearts I try to mend them back together tears keep them apart, a slipping friction moving them Sometimes I feel bliss thinking of your face, your kiss the music, the freedom! ah, sometimes I feel such bliss Sometimes I miss myself I travel so far into the other world floating, and dreaming please pull me back! Sometimes I feel you I feel our touch, our love I grip it and hold it tight dont make me let go... Sometimes I feel words they hurt, they sting or they calm, and love they circle around like a jumbled tornado Sometimes I feel pain "damn", I say "not this again" (but it still remembers to haunt me) Sometimes I feel life! I feel the birds swooping down near me I feel birth! I feel a new heartbeating! I take it all in, and push out whatever else I feel |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
hi Pixiepunker! welcome to passions,this is the first one of yours i have read but i will be looking for more of yours and i like this one because it is relatable and an enjoyable read,you have touched on many feeling with it and done it so well,keep writing  |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
.... I'm speachless, this is amazing, this is one of the best poems i have ever read, the way the paregraphs flow, yet it still always keeps meaning and the true deep feeling that it is expressing . I know a lot of what you say in your poem well enouth myself, I am glad you were able to write it down and share it, because I never ever managed to write down more than small bits of it . I so emphasise with what your saying, thanks for making me feel much better, I love a good read . Remember if you ever need someone to talk to or a cyber shoulder to cry on, You can always e-mail me. L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
I never knew my words could make someone say such nice things! Thank you SO much for your replies. You know what? To tell a secret, this poem took me all of 10 minutes to write... it all just flowed out... I was very impressed afterwards though! Thank you so much for your kind words! ~Dri |
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