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zzz
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0 posted 2001-06-06 11:21 AM


a brand new branch has sprouted
upon our family tree
a time of joy and happiness
but not alas for me

friends,a night of passion
then on to pastures new
none of them expecting
the arrival of you

confusion and much panic
i saw in both their eyes
both too young for looking
into a babies eyes

making a disision
as friends to stand together
to raise this child apart
as father and as mother

how were we to guess
the secret to be learned
at your first gasp of breath
the bridges would be burned

two visits,just two hours
is all we had with you
a harsh and cruel thing
to stop us seeing you

so now the fight begins
for rights for us to share
your life with all its dreams
a chance to show we care

i hope in time to come
ill glance upon that tree
no longer feeling sadness
but smiling happily

© Copyright 2001 marina mills - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2001-06-06 11:28 AM


interesting work..a sad story told in a few words..


Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2001-06-06 02:57 PM


ZZZ,
Interesting read said well.

azblond
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The Steamy Desert
3 posted 2001-06-06 03:04 PM


zzz...beautiful words...but I'm not sure I understand?  It's probably right in front of me, but I'm sure I'm missing the true beauty of the piece by my confusion.

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
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High Springs, Florida
4 posted 2001-06-06 07:11 PM


very nicely written..

a sad song you sing..i hope things work out soon...some tend to forget, its the child who suffers the sins of the parents...

hugs, g

zzz
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since 2001-06-06
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5 posted 2001-06-06 08:57 PM


thanks to you all for your comments its nice to feel so welcome i cant get over all the good stuff there is to read thanks again
zzzzzzzzzzzz

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2001-07-06 12:44 PM


Thought provoking and again? Forgive me for not reading sooner---I am making up for lost time, and so glad that this was here waiting for me. Thank you!
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