Open Poetry #14 |
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How Is It |
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Just A Man Junior Member
since 2001-06-02
Posts 15Pain |
Our attempts to shield the other from pain in fear and protective instinct only to have each and every defense fall away only in its erecting to hurt far deeper leaving scars far worse than what we tried only in vain to protect the other opening first chasms now worlds to seperate what always was what always should have been Ii have burned our home its heat unbearable I melt in puddles of apathy knowing my need to protect has cost me everything every tomorrow I have ever lived for Head hung wishing my neck were so I watch the embers lights slowly fade to disappear and in their waning glow, I see so clearly feel the endless night already pitch in black unseeing, unfeeling blinded, knowing eternal dark was wrought by my very own hand my sins my words To haunt forever more For there is no forgiveness it blazed to ashes upon our funeral pyre consumed with each of us and all that we called home and hope midst charred blackend ruins of hearts once loved I can see no tomorrows "In daring to dream, offering life,I am sentenced to life as a Deadman walking. Such ends all Love given." [This message has been edited by Just A Man (edited 06-05-2001).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
unbearable I melt in puddles of apathy the line above really stood out to me vivid piece |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Dark and somber. I hope this is fiction or that you find inner peace, or both. |
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Charisma![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
just as Interloper mentioned, dark and somber and I do hope the same that it's all fiction. if not than I wish that you will find a way out this darkness, and that a ray of light will lighten your path. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Tovi Member
since 2001-06-05
Posts 168 |
This is very powerful writing. It's left me pondering in sadness, people's lack of forgiveness and the cost. I felt this way once and was amazed to find one small bloom of tender hope amidst the ruins of all I'd felt I lost And realized that true love never dies I hope it's that way for you. ![]() Not only to say the right thing in the right place, but far more difficult, to leave unsaid the wrong thing at the tempting moment. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
This one gave me chills. It is never easy to admit that we have failed at something. Especially when that thing was more important to us than anything else. Intriguing write. All writing comes |
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Eye Junior Member
since 2001-06-10
Posts 28Outside Looking In |
Oh the best laid plans and worthy attempts make mice of men too often |
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