Open Poetry #14 |
The Sea Oat ( a revision...the original needed a good overhaul) |
Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This is an older poem and I had no realized the glaring errors that it contained until I read it again this morning. Sea Oat is what I'm naming the sailboat I buy when I move to the coast, hopefully sometime this year. On my web site you can see a painting I've done of her sailing into stormy seas. Know what? You people are the best. The Sea Oat by Michael More life behind than that ahead. So many paths I've walked along. Too many words that went unsaid. Favorite music, now old song. How could my beard have turned to gray? Too young am I for this to be. The many words I've still to say and many dreams I've yet to see. The many troubled waters crossed, sometimes the tiller stiff in hand. At times in charted waters, lost. Still others, I lost sight of land. At times, the wind is hard to find. Full-battened sails to catch the gust. Sometimes the grayness comes to mind. My instincts now I know to trust. The hour's late and I must make this crossing in the dead of night, to leave the safety of the shore. I'll add more sail, the wind is light. The Sea Oat moans both fore and aft and rides the swells in front of me. A fresh wind comes from out the West and drives her hard upon the sea. Of dead mariners do I think, on ocean bottom where they lie, of ships they trusted not to sink, of loved ones left at home to cry. Though my favorite songs are old, there is still youth beneath the gray. The voyage made this night is bold. The unsaid words I now will say. Ahead I push, I'm homeward bound. A fire they've kept that I might see, to guide the Sea Oat to that sound, that I might not be lost at sea. So eager, do I watch the night, while stars are swallowed in the deep and one by one, more near to light, much closer to my love to keep. Should my ship founder on its way, this voyage end and take my life, the words unsaid I now will say, I could not find a better wife. I became lost within your eyes. My compass broke the day we met. The deepest passion in me rose and from that day my sails were set. Like me, the Sea Oat too is gray. It takes on water now and then. So many sails I've had to mend, that I might journey on my way. So stoke the fire, I need the light. Oh how I long to see your face. Please push the darkness from this night. I'll only drown in your embrace. Proust- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely done, I understand this well...every word is true. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
As I said, does this not do well to serve the painting on your home page? I loved it this time even better than than last. Maybe you will take me sailing after some "country boil", yummy! Ah shucks, what are friends for if not to take you sailing and feed you full of sea-faring stories, and food? This was an incredible re-write, much improved. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Many of us who believe in reality, yet have an artist's heart.... know that we should go out doing what we do best....and enjoy most.... you are one of those who continue to inspire.... sail on Auguste! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 05-21-2001).] |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Of dead mariners do I think, on ocean bottom where they lie, of ships they trusted not to sink, of loved ones left at home to cry. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Naw ... not you. I truly enjoyed this work, especially the finale. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
There are so many intriguing thoughts and wonderful verses in this poem. I didn't read the first time round, but this one is superb. Congratulations on an exceptional write. Liz |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
passing shadows, Thanks for the "nicely done" and I'm glad you liked this one. Sharon, I would love to take you sailing and yes, I'll make the low country boil. Thanks, my friend, for reading and enjoying. Karilea, What a kind thing to say. Thank you and thank you also for taking time to read this rather long poem. Interloper, I'm glad you enjoyed this. I love the ocean and everything about it. Thank you Liz, Your generous comments are most appreciated. I thank you much for coming by and reading and hope all is well with you. Michael Proust- |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I'm bringing this back so others will have a chance to read it. It is a wonderful poem Liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael--so many lines to etch that say how awesome this is met within my heart it's island brings a poems worthy of sail's sing. |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
Truly memorable lines throughout this poem. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Great write. Plus been to your web site, some great art work also. A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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