Open Poetry #13 |
just a jaded bit of fringe |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
No. It doesn't take that much. Just the promise of your touch. Yes. I am in stand surprised to see a mirror in your eyes. (maybe) there's no compromise shades of gray-- fray realized, with just a jaded bit of fringe-- curtained thighs to hide the singe... and all my thought is therein hell. echo-- of the empty yell down the trap wherein I dwell In chains of pain-- reverse of spell. May every waver of my voice-- each drop of tear in my eye's moist and from your need to feel rejoice-- Quite real in my denial's hell. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Serenity, this is a powerful piece of writing sweetie... My goodness, I find myself wanting to re-read your poem twice over before coming here in replybox and then when I do get here, oh boy, I'm stuck on finding the right words to convey to you just how much your poetry innocently captivates this reader... hugs2u ~coco~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
and all my thought is therein hell. echo-- of the empty yell down the trap wherein I dwell In chains of pain-- reverse of spell. Oh I love these lines Hon A very powerful, very deep poem. hugs Maree Love which is not always springing is always dying. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Exquisite poetry, O serene One.... Thanks for the read... Regards, Sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yes. I am in stand surprised to see a mirror in your eyes. ================== fray realized, with just a jaded bit of fringe-- curtained thighs to hide the singe... and all my thought is therein hell. echo-- of the empty yell =================== May every waver of my voice-- each drop of tear in my eye's moist and from your need to feel rejoice-- Quite real in my denial's hell. ============================= welcome to me world. "Just the promise of your touch." "and from your need to feel rejoice" mirror mirror on me wall ... It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ya gotta know just how hard this one hits right now...yeah yeah yeah I know you told me so...but... |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Where do I begin, how do I pick, what do I say? Mm, well K, I think I've told you before that I need you to print your writings on 5x7 sheets and bind them together to make me a little book, you know, to carry around in my backpack for all those little moments in my day that I want to read something just totally cool. Your words. I enjoy you. *Peace. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Powerful, clever, and hits home for me!~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: ..... you made me cry....... loveya harpo |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i got chills... no foolin. "curtained thighs to hide the singe" i know this..... well woven words, as always. You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How.....do you do this? |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Astounding, Serenity. You always leave me in awe of your talent. All writing comes |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You're in perfect form, Serenity |
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