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Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

0 posted 2001-04-05 09:23 AM

Two becoming one
Through shared words, winding their way
Spirits floating high

write with grace, all others lose face;
"Jo was very tall, thin, ... and reminded one of a colt..." LMA

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-04-05 09:26 AM

I like this VERY much.....nicely done!!

SEA

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

2 posted 2001-04-05 09:27 AM

Oh, Queen of Senryu...these look like fun to do.

Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17

Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA

3 posted 2001-04-05 09:34 AM

I love short form poetry because one can say so much within three lines of thoughts as you have done.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

4 posted 2001-04-05 11:53 AM

Yes, this is how I feel when I read someone's poetry! A lovely senryu! You're a natural at these~

Take care,
Melissa~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

5 posted 2001-04-05 12:16 PM

Lovely, lovely union!

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-04-05 12:17 PM

Wonderfully written!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

7 posted 2001-04-05 04:26 PM

i'm high on that o yuh

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

8 posted 2001-04-05 05:18 PM

Two becoming one
Not just a joining of hands
Spiritually

your words give the first line real meaning

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

9 posted 2001-04-05 05:20 PM

My spirit floats high reading this. Thank you.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

10 posted 2001-04-24 11:07 AM

you are pretty good at these...will hunt for more of your senryus....

keep writing

BrightStar
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since 2001-04-08

Posts 219

11 posted 2001-04-25 11:17 AM

Lovely poem.

lunatic
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 172

12 posted 2001-04-26 05:52 PM

one plus one is two
verse plus feeling equals love
now souls entwined

Moonstruck

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

13 posted 2001-04-26 09:01 PM

I really thought this was well written. Very nice!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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