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Patchwork Love----Packratmike's challenge line
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Patchwork Love----Packratmike's challenge line |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
They signed the papers today, The ones that said they no longer cared, That the last stitch of their patchwork love Had finally come unravelled. All the years spent gathering All the fragments of their life together, Quilted together like Grandmas old comforter, It all comes down to this. Ripped and shredded...this piece his That one hers Each penstroke, a knifeblade cutting the seams Of their patchwork memories. Until all that remains Are tiny scraps of pain Tossed at each other like needles Pricking fingers and drawing blood. They signed the papers today... |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Wow Paula, great answer to the challenge. Loved it! Mike |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Yes, this happens just to damn often. You made a very valid point and it all came from a challenge line. Very good. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oh, this one hurts. Such finality to it all. Very nicely put. All writing comes |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Though the picture you painted was vivid with the colors of a lifetime...the end seemed stark, like the black and white of the papers signed. Well done. Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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forevernbluejeans Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 76 |
This is a very emotional poem...I like the idea of pieces of your life being made into a quilt |
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