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Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

0 posted 2001-04-04 11:37 PM

(Post #5000)

There’s not much in it –
a smile
a touch, a bump of
shoulder against arm

it’s enough
to remember the wharf
and wind. The churning inside –
sea-struck

this one, these eyes, they aren’t
the same:

it’s all too fresh and if the trembling
can’t be controlled, well
those other eyes had promised
to wait

this is natural – it’s what attraction is

(Just shudder out the memory of gulls and peace
and patterns. That face no longer
there in the morning - sleep-crinkled)

All obscurity starts with a danger:
Your dangers are many. I
Cannot look much but your form suffers
Some strange injury
Sylvia Plath

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2001-04-05 12:59 PM

Congratulations on post number 5000!! I remember some of your early posts, and how you gradually opened up in the discussion forums...and then became a Moderator. You've come a long way...

But your poetry has always remained the same...unique, fresh, insightful and imaginative. It's always a pleasure to read you!!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

2 posted 2001-04-05 01:55 AM

this is wonderful K
you never cease to amaze me, you know that?

this one, these eyes, they aren’t
the same:

indeed they're not

it's always a pleasure to read you dear

M

wandering glider
Senior Member

since 2001-04-04

Posts 501
aloft

3 posted 2001-04-05 02:00 AM

It can seem to take so little . . . in the right place . . . at the right time.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

4 posted 2001-04-05 04:21 AM

Kamla,

You make writing look so easy...

WOW

and many congratulations on the 5

regards,
sudhir

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-04-05 08:47 AM

this one, these eyes, they aren’t
the same:

it’s all too fresh and if the trembling
can’t be controlled, well
those other eyes had promised
to wait

this is natural – it’s what attraction is

(Just shudder out the memory of gulls and peace
and patterns. That face no longer
there in the morning - sleep-crinkled)
==================================
Congrats on 5000th Kam!!

I love the honesty and vunerablity that is always there in your work ....

"it’s all too fresh and if the trembling
can’t be controlled, well
those other eyes had promised
to wait

this is natural – it’s what attraction is"

those lines a perfect example of my point.
the sincerety of your pen is always evident.
excellent write.. sweet butterfly sharer poet

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2001-04-05 09:11 AM

Many Kudos to you, little K....and 5000 Congrats on a job well done!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2001-04-05 10:29 AM

That face no longer
there in the morning - sleep-crinkled)

This hit me hard, K! So sad, and it summed of the feel of this for me! Sort of a peaceful sleepy bliss followed by painful awareness of alone...stunning!

Congrats on 5,000 my friend!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2001-04-05 10:38 AM

Kamla--Congratulations on the big 5000..thank you for always being such an honest and original poet...just like you are a person..and for responding in the same way.

(Just shudder out the memory of gulls and peace
and patterns. That face no longer
there in the morning - sleep-crinkled)

Those last lines took my breath away! Hugs!

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

9 posted 2001-04-05 10:44 AM

I absolutely had to get back to this one...

and maybe many more times....

this time it hits me even harder...

Regards Kamla,
Sudhir

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2001-04-05 11:25 AM

Powerful one. Congratulations on your 5000th!!!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

banburycross
Senior Member

since 2001-03-27

Posts 946
viginia

11 posted 2001-04-05 11:33 AM

A beautiful piece for your 5000th post. congratulations

Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing.

wayoutwalt
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

12 posted 2001-04-05 11:35 AM

Awseome Kamster and i love how you didnt announce your 5000th kudos to you

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

13 posted 2001-04-05 12:29 PM

Sweet Severn,
I agree with JM and all the rest. Your work is a delight to digest.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

14 posted 2001-04-05 12:45 PM

you know that I've always loved your work from the first. . . and this is why. . .

congratulations my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

15 posted 2001-04-05 05:42 PM

Imagining our reactions is always so much different than what they wind up being it seems. Still, we wonder. Another masterful muse your vagueness.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

16 posted 2001-04-06 08:07 PM

Library-- sorry

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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