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Did I Say I Love You Yet?
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Did I Say I Love You Yet? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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On soft wings of night I cry Lonely seeking wings to fly Never having wanted more To wake my gifts for love's implore. Of dust and travel I am weary Helpless here, I'm worn and dreary. Place me please upon your lips, I may take your love in triple sips. Edging slowly drunken will Stumbling then but will I spill? Softly tendering in your arms, Love's woke moments stole my charms. I've nothing left to hide in sir, You've stolen within, Its there now, you stir. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
go get 'em Jenn!! Kathleen Blake |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Place me please upon your lips"..this is a good place to begin...James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wow. . . there's a depth of feeling here. . . it's excellent. . .  --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'On soft wings of night I cry Lonely seeking wings to fly Never having wanted more To wake my gifts for love's implore.' Great write, Temptress! I can definitely relate to this one... sp  to be with you... |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
damn, girl!!! when did you start rhyming??? what a NATURAL you are!! this is wonderful in cadence, rhythm, and wording from the heart.... i loved it!!! (and thank you again so much for trying to reach me the other day... it meant a LOT to me!!! we'll talk soon, k?) |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Kathleen, Thanks for reading. Wish I could!  James, Thanks you. Indeed it would be a great beginning. Sven, Thank you. The depth of feeling is controlling my pen lately. It certainly is refreshing. Snowpants, Thank you. Relating is sometimes just as painful isn't it? Doreen, You're welcome. Anything I can do for a friend. As far as the rhyme..well it just seems to come lately. I can only give credit to some wonderful inspiration that has loosened my walls a bit. I have a notebook with new rhyming stuff lately, but have yet to put it out there.  I'm glad you think I'm a natural though. That helps a lot. Be well, Lady.  |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Very nicely written. I had to pull this one from the past because its so good. Ryhming is a very hard thing to d and you seem to have done very well |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TemptyOne~ Very nicely said. I enjoyed the cadence as well. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Love it..the rhyming is great!!!! Do more of it. Red |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Yes..why not. You can say... I love to nice poetry. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I love this side of you as well, it's a delight to read....you have a remarkable talent.... Greeneyes~ *** "Within you I lose myself |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I really like this one Temptress . . very tender read . . . All writing comes |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Place me please upon your lips, I may take your love in triple sips. Ahhh... and then savor! *G* I like this lots, Jenn... Well done! |
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