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Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-04-04 11:24 AM

Fairytale Senryu

Adoration flew
In on breezes from the south
Northern climes held her

Gentle kisses passed
From her lips on breezes south
Touched his cheek softly

Only in his dream
She exists in loving heart
He glances northward

Only in her dream
He exists in loving heart
She looks southerly

Castles in the sky
Thunderous clouds, billow white
Catch love on the wind

jfreak
Member

since 1999-06-17

Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA

1 posted 2001-04-04 11:28 AM

Sunshine,

What a beautiful poem. I especially loved the way that you kept it so general. She looking southerly, he looking northerly. We should all be able to relate, those of us still searching. Loved it.

J~

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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-04-04 12:00 PM

ok, well between you and Marge, I can't seem to turn off these useless tears......(loved this)

SEA

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

3 posted 2001-04-04 12:38 PM

Lovely...

Regards O Karilea,
Sudhir

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2001-04-04 03:01 PM

I just love fairytales 'cuz sometimes they come true

You are a dream come true...

Write on and I will read, and read, and read, and.... enjoy.

Live for love. Without love, you don't live.

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-04-04 04:47 PM

Wonderful fairytale, Sunshine. Simple yet, sweet.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

6 posted 2001-04-04 05:18 PM

beautiful!!

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

7 posted 2001-04-04 06:29 PM

Well Ms. Romance, this was beautiful!~

Take care,
Melissa~

Wilfred Yeats
Member Elite

since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

8 posted 2001-04-04 07:45 PM

Just what I needed today - don't know if it will generate a senryu or a cinquain - but something's coming ~G~ - truly truly lovely

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