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Commitment Senyrus |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(with some obvioous inspiration from Sunshine - -I've not done any cinquains for a while - My thanks to her for reawakening my interest) Cannot be ignored Emotions spoken with eyes Love beyond all doubt As long as there’s breath Engraved within both our hearts Memories transcend time Though cold winds shall blow Shared warmth shall be our furnace Ours alone to know On shores, lofty trails Our eyes clasp, as well as hands Knowledge borne of time Borne on ether’s winds Lips brand mutual ownership Given, accepted The first duty of love is to listen. ~ Paul Tillich ~ [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 04-03-2001).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely work. Cinquains are my son's favorite kind of poetry to write - I'll have to show him these! Corinne |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I only recently found this form and you did a great job with it!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, I am glad to know that I inspire others.... a wonderful read, Mr. Yeats! Thank you for this lovely gift! |
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Panne447 Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 196S.A. TX |
Wil, This is a great piece or series of Senyrus but these are not cinquains. For one thing, each cinquain- whether formal or informal - is made up of 5 lines. A formal cinquain should be only 2 syllables on line 1, 4 on line 2, 6 on 3, 8 on 4 and back to 2 on line 5: informal cinquains are 1 word on line 1, 2 words on line 2, 3 word on 3. 4 words on 4 and end with i word on line 5. Hope that helps. Tho, you might have just typo'd - But they are terrific Senyru. Thaks for sharing them. Panne |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Corinne, Kathleen, Sunshine - Please see my reply below to Panne447 Panne447= You're talking to someone wjho knows better - I really cannot tell you where my mind was when I titled this - as you can see I've corrected it = cinquain: 2,4,6,8,2 haiku, senyru: 5,7,5 What can I say but thanks (blush) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This is lovely...I have come to love senryus..so much said in so few words...its a gift "If you are going to walk on thin ice, you might as well dance!" |
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