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The Way I Moved Through the World
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The Way I Moved Through the World |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The Way I Moved Through the World I walked alone downtown today Though the shops were mostly closed Paused before the windows where we’d stood Looked to my side, remembered you there And walking on I wondered At the heaviness of my step Though the day Was light and warm It came to me That I move differently You no longer by my side A subtle consumption of my soul is now reality Yet I spare you most the pain Instead, I write it out In words you rarely read And even when you do You don’t realize it’s me The way I moved through the world Was different When you walked by my side I was young, again…in love, again Believing we would never lose Speak when you are angry--and you'll make the best speech you'll ever regret...Laurence J. Peter |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
now this is impressive |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
You leave the reader much to ponder on, JLR, with this writing. I compliment you!
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JLR, Thank you for sharing the walk with us. We never do see the reality of it coming until it is too late. I guess if we did, we might not take that chance. Good writing.  LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
And soon you will walk differently again...the pain wont always be with you darlin girl... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's always different when you move by yourself. . . but, when we learn to move by ourselves. . .we learn how to move with someone else better. . . great poem!!! ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hey, this is one of those, "wish I had written that" poems. jwesley |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
VERRRRRRRRRY nice,I like it alot! |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
Yes, Sven is right, we do move differently when alone, I know I do. Your poem was so very lovely JLR. Words have a way of healing my soul, I hope your words might heal yours. Great poem! KateGenuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is such a difference between being lonely and alone, and once you get the hang of it, being alone and enjoying yourself becomes a wonderful thing. However, the transition from one to the other is heavy on one's heart, and you captured this beautifully. Bravo! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I really like this...it moves so nicely down the screen - excellent!  KAll obscurity starts with a danger: |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
R.J. You are never alone. I enjoyed this one. Keep up the good work. :-) Take Care, Laura |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
well expressed....brilliant writing!! Nathan |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i like the idealism and i know this poem too well yuh yuh yu huy huyh arggh women |
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