Heaven.........( a cinquain....I think?)

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SEA

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0 posted 2001-03-29 08:56 PM

Wonder
How it would be
If I could see your smile
Could see the sparkle in your eyes………
~ Heaven ~

~SEA~

Marina
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1 posted 2001-03-29 09:03 PM

A wonder Cinquain at that! It's definetly going around.

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

SEA

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2 posted 2001-03-29 09:04 PM

So did I do this right? It's my first one

SEA

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2001-03-29 09:04 PM

I remember cinquains well, and this sure seems like one to me. Well done Sea...

Enjoy life...this is NOT a dress rehearsal. *s*

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4 posted 2001-03-29 09:05 PM

GS~ thank you, is there more to them than just the 2,4,6,8,2, count?

SEA

Jamie
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5 posted 2001-03-29 09:08 PM

wonder
no more my dear
indeed it's a cinquain
and a very good one at that
I think

wonderful -- are the Seas achanging???

Jamie

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"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

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6 posted 2001-03-29 09:10 PM

Jamie~ na...she's just playing with words tonight.....

thank you

SEA

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7 posted 2001-03-29 09:10 PM

Well I would definately have to go back and check some challenges I did at another forum, but it sure seems to me that Is the correct count, but then I'm kind of rusty at this poetry writing thing here lately. You done good Sea....*w*

Enjoy life...this is NOT a dress rehearsal. *s*

Marina
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8 posted 2001-03-29 09:11 PM

you did it perfectly. Five lines with a total of 22 syllables using the 2, 4, 6 ,8,2 count.

Great Job!

Marina

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SEA

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9 posted 2001-03-29 09:12 PM

GS~

thank you

SEA

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10 posted 2001-03-29 09:13 PM

Marina~ thank you too

SEA

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11 posted 2001-03-29 09:36 PM

I remember my first time...it was wonderful! Good work, SEA

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12 posted 2001-03-29 09:51 PM

lovely SEA....

Greeneyes~

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kaile

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13 posted 2001-03-31 11:19 AM

i be honest

yours are so full of love

VAS
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14 posted 2001-03-31 11:28 AM

WEll I enjoyed this one. As far as the cinquain rules I know, it fits 3 of the parameters, top and bottom line are synonyms, and it has five lines. As far as the rest of the body, it's different from the rules I'm acquainted with, however, that doesn't mean there aren't other forms of cinquains.

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