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Happily Never After (2 parts. dedicated to Sven and Meadowmuse)
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Happily Never After (2 parts. dedicated to Sven and Meadowmuse) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
HAPPILY NEVER AFTER PART I Far across fertile fields and raging rivers Through woods filled with wooden slivers Underneath the bluest of skies Lies a castle built of stone and timber Proudly do the heralding flags fly Brightly does the sun ever shine there Washing over the merry people clear Rising up in the middle of the castle, a tower Strong and tall, an example of the royal power Parapets placed upon the top like a crown The princess within, spends every waking hour Forlornly looking out, and down Fingers working the loom, spinning through time Anything to ease her heavy, burdened mind Below the tower, the people move unknowing Their faces beaming, a happy countenance showing Going about with everyday cares While up above, constant tears flowing A still and stifling silence in the air As she waits with hands clasped saintly, Waiting for her prince to return, patiently HAPPILY NEVER AFTER PART II Far across barren fields and bloodied rivers Through woods filled with fallen soldiers Underneath the darkest of skies Fights a prince built of courage and vigor Proudly does his singing sword fly Vainly does the sun try to expose tears Washing over the face, grim and feared Rising up in the middle of battle, he does tower Strong and tall, an example of his royal power Arrows, axes and swords rain down The prince, possessed, fights his greatest hour Finally fatigued and outnumbered, he is cut down Fingers working the straps, running out of time Removing armor to ease his heavy, burdened mind Above his form, the soldiers fight unknowing Their faces hardening, a deadly countenance showing Fighting others with their murderous wares While underfoot, constant tears flowing And a still and suffocating silence in the air As he waits for the end to come, against death defiantly, Vowing to one day return to her, he waits patiently |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, Excellent! |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
my goodness, this is fantastic....makes me think they'll meet in another life.....and remember.......  SEA |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Great Work! regards, sudhir |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
My compliments, PK! Heart tugging at the end. "Often the test of courage is not to die but to live" |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Than you Sun, SEA, Sudhir, and "Just"...thanks for reading. I might call mself Just a Guy...I like that *L* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh my word, what a brave and tragic tale! I am quite disarmed by this lovely, sad story, Poetic Knight and honored, of course, by its dedication. This literally breathes of undying devotion, courage and valor. Congratulations on such a fine, poetic portrait and thank you, in earnest, for writing and sharing it. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
You're very welcome Claire. What can I say? You and Sven started something here, with knights and ladies, chivalry, and romance. My favorite things, so thank you. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Indeed PK, a superb story that you've told here. . . I like that each could stand on its own as well as together. . . I loved the way that you used the same rhyme scheme and mostly the same end words for each one. . . Ok. . . that's the technical part. . . And now, this is just superb. . . the images are wonderful. . . the stories are heartfelt. . . and the tale left me sighing. . . knowing that they will meet again. . . Thank you for your words. . . may they, along with the memories of love like this. . . always last. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Is there going to be a part 3 and 4?!?!? I'm thinking you should continue this beautiful story............... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is nice...James |
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Mabel A. Dilley Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 859Seattle, WA, USA |
The stuff fairy tales and magic are made from. Great write. "I am not now that which I have been." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Spectacular stories. Woven so nicely into the time..of happily never after.. Sandra |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you all, noble gentlemen and ladies. |
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