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Third Trimester Of The Heart
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Third Trimester Of The Heart |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Third Trimester Of The Heart ~*Marge Tindal*~  Sonographic thoughts of you blip across the swollen moon night As heartbeats of endearment flat-line resuscitation attempts can not make it right I must expel you from my thoughts for there is no joy to be found No longer can I gestate the pain of having you around So I scream out - Abort ! Abort ! With laborious effort my sanity I must defend Sadly, in this third trimester of the heart our love has come to an end ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That's quite a different take, Margie...I like the way your mind works! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WOW....you are sooooo clever...... wow.....  hugs SEA |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
OUCH!!! well said... ... sometimes it's like giving birth.... labor can be quite painful, no doubt about it... an intense poem with layers and levels of meaning... wonderfully done.... the realization and birth of you in the truth of how things are... if that makes sense... well, that's my analysis anyway... and i'm just the reader, you, the Poet... and "good" poetry says we all get something different from it... i liked this because it was concise, saying so much with so few words, a quality this rambler admires.... and so very emotionally real excellent work, my friend |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Thanks. Awwww ! It's not work ... it's poetry !  SEA~ Thanks to you. And bunches of those *hugs* right back at ya' ! Doreen~ Thanks for letting me know you found the 'layers'. *Tee-Hee* ... been accused of a 'ramble' or two myself ! It's also a trait my muses admire ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Marge~ I love how you do this....  you are so creative... Lauren~ *** Nothing Beautiful In This World |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Whew...I think the doctor slapped me... this was not what I expected by the title you are soo clever and full of poetic surprises... which speaks to your talent. very cool employ of metaphor Margie-girl. give new meaning to the words labor of love. later-groovy-muse-gator tis never easy being a moth, |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Reading here in open reminds me of a lot more creativeness. Beautiful read...Thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Such a clever title...such a powerful write! |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Marge--A creative way of expressing falling out of love...passing nicely penned. Poeminister "At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet." -Plato |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Enjoyed this Marge. Clever and well crafted. s arthur |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ Thank you. I was thinking that for some, the time comes to abort the feelings that cause them pain ... think that works ? Sort of a 'moving on' time. I appreciate you. JanetMarie~ Well ... I'm just full of surprise, huh ? Just a little 'thinker' ! Acire~ A very nice compliment. I thank you. JLR~ Thanks for mention of the title ... sometimes that's where an idea begins ... and sometimes it comes after a poem is written. In this case ... it came first ... and the thoughts followed. PoeMinister~ Thank you so much for your thoughts. SArthurGrey~ Appreciate the read and your comments. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yanno, I have a practical theory about love and life, I treat it like a baseball game, and my rules are simple, "three strikes, yourrrreee out! Very well done my fair lady! ~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~ |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Hi Marge, This piece really hit home with me in a way. Only, I'm still hanging on, left on life support! I really enjoyed this one! ~Sheri |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Very sad, Marge and brilliant use of metaphor.......terrific piece!! Nathan |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mysteria~ Oh yeah ... right ! You'd steal base in a heartbeat ! LOL ! Irie~ Awwwww ! *Hugs* Nate, my friend~ Thanks ... pleased you enjoyed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
But how can you abort the hurt And leave the heart still beating? For somehow, getting rid of both Seems somewhat self-defeating! Sorry, Marge... couldn't resist... (Okay, Okay... I didn't try. *G*) Great poem, dear lady, and wise advice... but ya gotta know some of us are gonna whine forever... buy ear plugs! *G* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal~ Now ... quit that whining ! I heard enough already ! !  LOL ! You are such a character ... Hey ... maybe ... it was a 'falsely impregnated' heart !  Groannnnnnnnnnn !  Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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latin passion Senior Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 576 |
Powerful visual you pen. I'm speachless. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LatinPassion~ Thank you ! Check your pulse ... ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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