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Martie

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0 posted 2001-03-28 10:29 PM

On a Thursday
(reposted because of love still and always)

It was twenty one years ago
on a Thursday
of a summer evening
when couples stroll
and jasmine perfumes the air.

Laughter stole over backyard fences
and windows were open and lit with family
when you took my hand
and softened my lips with your eyes.

I remember you said something
with your heart
that was so full of your expression
that the caress of sound
feathered across me
and I breathed deeply
to taste your scent.

The corners curved around you
like the slivered moon,
and the street lights
made our shadows melt together
in provocative prediction.

I was so wounded with the sting
of a poisoned past
and so hungry to fill the void
left by time’s change
that I thought my meaning
might be in you.

And so I fell into your love,
a dove with broken wing
and nestled there
where your back curved
and learned to fly.

Now,
it is Thursday
and spring is here
when sweet peas
in rainbow dresses
scent the air,
and sunsets draw the sky
with melted crayons.

I watch in reverence
as the night ascends around us,
chills the air where I gather
and turns me towards
your warm encircling

where flying is free

Kit McCallum

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1 posted 2001-03-28 10:35 PM

"And so I fell into your love,
a dove with broken wing
and nestled there
where your back curved
and learned to fly."

Ahhh Martie ... so delicate and lovely! You have such an amazing talent for imagery, just beautiful!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2001-03-28 11:40 PM

when you took my hand
and **softened my lips with your eyes.**

==========================
that the caress of sound
**feathered across me**
and I breathed deeply
to taste your scent.

****The corners curved around you
like the slivered moon,
and the street lights
made our shadows melt together
in provocative prediction.****
(this whole verse is so cool!!)

I was so wounded with the sting
of a poisoned past
and so hungry to fill the void
left by time’s change
**that I thought my meaning
might be in you.**

And so I fell into your love,
a dove with broken wing
**and nestled there
where your back curved
and learned to fly.**
=============================
when sweet peas
in rainbow dresses
scent the air,
and sunsets draw the sky
with melted crayons.
(oh man)

**I watch in reverence
as the night ascends around us,
chills the air where I gather
and turns me towards
your warm encircling**

where flying is free
=======================
OH my ...
Martie this is absolutely the most amazing poem ...
I am sitting here with tears ...
such pure unadulterated admire and inspire..
this is so perfect in its imagery and its expression ...
every verse is piece of poetry on its own...
**so many wonderful lines**
but its the sincere joy and wonderment of that moment your words capture in this, that just moved me so.
I will never think of Thursday the same

amazing write, oh how I wish I had wrote this

SUBMITplease

oh you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
my body aches to breathe your breath
your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLachlan~

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 03-28-2001).]

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-03-28 11:55 PM

I shall not make this long and drawn out - this was poetry at its finest - absolute perfection!

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-03-29 08:41 AM

Oh Martie, get this one published!

Just A Woman
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since 2001-03-10

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5 posted 2001-03-29 09:10 AM

Martie, you have quickly become one of my favorite writers.

I just loved this.

"Often the test of courage is not to die but to live"

~Vittorio Alferi~

SEA

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with you

6 posted 2001-03-29 09:39 AM

Martie, this brought tears to my eyes.....such love...so very beautiful....your words touch me.

SEA

Corinne
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7 posted 2001-03-29 09:41 AM

Martie,

reading your work is like remembering falling in love for the first time.

Always full of peace.

Corinne

Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

8 posted 2001-03-29 09:41 AM

"where flying is free"

YES... of course...

Martie, my friend... this is way beyond fabulous... such lovely poetry...

Regards,
sudhir

Wilfred Yeats
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Wilmington, Delaware

9 posted 2001-03-29 11:38 AM

You're so fortunate to have found a mending lasting love - and I (we) are fortunate that you can share your beautiful poetic visions with us.

jellybeans
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10 posted 2001-03-29 11:48 AM

this is incredible martie....love the images...the whole thought, and the creativity...sigh...this tends to give us with a broken wing hope...and I need that right now...thank you lady

Martie

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11 posted 2001-03-29 01:33 PM

Kit--Thank you so much for your warm reply.

Janet--Again I thank you for your enthusiasm...you know I love it!

Sharon--A piece of heart is not perfection, but human...thanks.

Karilea--Okay hon, I'll try.

Just a Woman--What a very nice thing to say...thank you.

Sea--I'm glad to have touched you...that pleases me.

Corinne--Thanks for such a sweet comment...wish I always felt that peace.

Sudhir--thank you, my friend.

Bill--Yes I am...thank you for your words.

Jellybeans--Those broken wings I had to mend myself...you an too.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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Louisiana

12 posted 2001-03-29 04:39 PM

I was so wounded with the sting
of a poisoned past
and so hungry to fill the void
left by time’s change
that I thought my meaning
might be in you.

And so I fell into your love,
a dove with broken wing
and nestled there
where your back curved
and learned to fly.

This is so full of love... it makes me wish for a Thursday of such beginnings. *S* Beautiful!

Auguste

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Posts 3953
By the sea

13 posted 2001-03-29 06:49 PM

Ahh...Martie.

Very romantic and sweet.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

doreen peri
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Virginia

14 posted 2001-03-29 08:00 PM

quote:
The corners curved around you
like the slivered moon,
and the street lights
made our shadows melt together
in provocative prediction.

god, i LOVE your writing and the way you use words to bring back the memory or forever......

.... lovely, martie... youare truly gifted and in the right profession.... the scent of flowers is you..... thank you for the read

Janet Marie
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15 posted 2001-03-31 12:15 PM

I remember you said something
with your heart
that was so full of your expression
that the caress of sound
feathered across me
and I breathed deeply
to taste your scent.
===========================

needed another read of this jewel in your crown ...
and cuz silly me forgot to put it in my library *L*
as Sy would say... I had a senior moment

this poem is amazing sweet poet ...
miles to go before I sleep

It's such a clever innocence with which you show myself to me
As if you know how it feels to never be who you wanted to be
~jackson browne~

Martie

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16 posted 2001-03-31 11:03 AM

Ruth--It can happen any day...not just a Thursday....thanks for being such a sweet replier.

Michael--Thank you for the sweet reply.

Doreen--funny thing is...I'm allergic to many scents...now does that make sense? Thank you for the reply...I'm glad you liked the poem.

Janet--You can't have a senior moment until you're a senior. Thanks for coming back.

Janet Marie
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17 posted 2002-08-07 04:36 PM

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