I feel so lost......poem I

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Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

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Netherlands

0 posted 2001-05-16 05:32 PM

Many years ago, my husband suffered from severe depressions for quite a long time. I wrote some poems cause that's my way (as many of yours) to deal with sorrow. They were written in Dutch of course, but I tried to translate three of them into English. They don't rhyme anymore and maybe I used some wrong words, but I hope you'll understand them anyway. He's fully recovered by the way and now "we live happely ever after".

First Poem

I feel so lost
when I notice you're disappearing slowly
in the mist of your own world

I feel so sad
when I notice that the distance between us
becomes disproportionately wide

I feel so powerless
when I notice that I'm not capable of
lifting the burden off your shoulders

The only thing I can do
is keep loving you

Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11

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1 posted 2001-05-16 05:36 PM

Ah, your strength, AND your love, shine through this....

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2001-05-16 06:01 PM

A soft and substantial expression of your love and concern...James

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2001-05-16 06:05 PM

Titia,
Well done I enjoyed.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

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East Lansing, MI USA

4 posted 2001-05-16 06:49 PM

excellent. . .and it doesn't lose anything in the translation. . . you've done well with this one. . .

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Secret Whisper
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since 2001-01-25

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Through the Looking Glass

5 posted 2001-05-16 06:57 PM

Depression not only is a disease to those of us who are dying from it, but also for those around us. It is so wonderful to hear that your husband has recovered, it gives hope.

"What I was living, the same am I now, dead." --Capaneus, THE INFERNO

Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06

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6 posted 2001-05-16 07:26 PM

I also suffer from depression and I am so happy there are good times for the both of you now.

Kathleen

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Balladeer

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7 posted 2001-05-16 07:29 PM

This is beautiful and heart-felt writing..you translated it excellently and maintained the integrity of the work. Nicely done....

walker
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since 2001-02-11

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Florida

8 posted 2001-05-16 07:44 PM

Perfect in every sense. And this one hits home.

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

9 posted 2001-05-16 07:49 PM

Decaflame..........thank you

JamesMichael.......I still love him

Seymour Tabin......I'm glad to hear

Sven...............thank you, I keep trying

Secret Whisper.....Yes, people "forget" that the ones beside are in pain too

Dear Irish Rose....I gathered something from your poems, hope you will feel better now, love you

Balladeer..........I'm honored, thank you

Thank all of you for your lovely words

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

10 posted 2001-05-17 12:05 PM

Titia
Your words brought a chill to my spine as I have suffered depression and could relate so much to what you wrote and I could truly sympathise with you and your husband. I have written some poetry about my dark days of depression and these have helped many others as well as myself. Thank you for sharing with us what is such a debilatating illness and one that is so misunderstood.
Take care......Sue

Suetang

RMW
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since 2001-03-21

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11 posted 2001-05-17 12:07 PM

Titia...Thank you for sharing this.....beauty. Bob

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

12 posted 2001-05-17 01:00 AM

Oh my, Walker, forgot you yesterday, shame but then, it was two AM, thank you for your confidence in me.

Suetang.......Yes, nobody knows, till it overcomes them, thank you

And RMW, there was some hesitation, because it was so long ago, but now I'm glad I shared.

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

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New Orleans, LA

13 posted 2001-05-17 09:10 AM

Very nice Titia...and I am happy for you. I wish you 2 the best.

Songbird
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since 1999-12-15

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Missouri

14 posted 2001-05-29 07:42 PM

Oh, this was so beautiful.. and I am sure there was nothing lost in the translation.. none of it could have been said any better. You must be a very special lady to have such empathy for your husband. I am sure glad I didn't miss this.. it was really special.

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