He Wed....She Wed ........Kit McCallum & Balladeer

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Balladeer

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0 posted 2001-05-14 12:00 PM

With all the preparations that had built up to this day,
The plans, the lists, the chaos; all decisions under-way;
It came to this, the final hour, when all was said and done,
The last defining moments of her single life as one.

The bridesmaids chattered endlessly, fluffed up her gown and veil,
One commented, "My dear, you should sit down, you're looking pale."
She needed time to think, and asked them all to leave the room,
And heard one say on exiting . "Has someone seen the groom?"

The groom was busy wrestling with a tie around his neck
Hands shaking, sweating like a monk, he was a nervous wreck!
Reality was setting in...the day had finally come
To say goodbye to moments of a carefree, single bum.

What happened here? He did not know! One minute he was free
Cavorting in his bachelorhood, as happy as could be
And then one day he fell in love which now had led him here
Staring at a penguin staring right back from the mirror!

"Has someone seen the groom?" began to echo through her ears,
Now why would they have said that? She recanted through her fears;
Perhaps he wouldn't show, and leave her standing in the aisle .
While waiting for him alter bound, as he skipped town in style?!

She paced the floor and wrung her hands, for did she really know,
The man she was about to join, just moment's left to go?
Perhaps she should have let her father "do" that background check,
But she had laughed it off, oh my . she really was a wreck!

"It seems like only yesterday..", he thought, "I asked to date her
Now here I stand, hands shaking, like a Roman gladiator!
The crowd is outside cheering as I take a final breath
All knowing that this soldier is about to meet his death!!!"

"Oh, no!", he thought, "That is not true. It isn't death - but life!
I love the girl with all my heart...I WANT her for my wife!
She'll give me love and happiness and share my joy and more..
(So why is it, within my mind, I hear the lions roar?)"

Her father tapped upon the door, and asked to join her then,
She paused a moment, "Get a grip!" she whispered from within,
"Come on in dad." she answered, as he walked in through the door,
The second that she saw him, all the tears began to pour.

He smiled and took her in his arms, his little girl all grown,
"He'll be here soon." he comforted, (or else I'll break his bones!)"
He tipped her chin to look at him, and said "What do you think?"
"I've got the car out back if you should change your mind." he winked.

He heard a knock and there stood Bob, his best man, at the door
His eyes still bloodshot from the bachelor gig the night before.
"It's time", he said, "to make the female population cry.
Not every day one gets to see a living legend die!"

"The church is filled. The music's playing. Flowers are everywhere.
Your sister looks ridiculous with sparkles in her hair
So let's go, pal. It's time to rock and roll and wed your bride
Unless, of course, you're smart enough to run somewhere and hide!!!!

She smiled up at her father, to the man she so adored,
He brushed away a final tear, from both their eyes once more;
She took a breath and nodded . to the door they walked ahead,
And took her place in line behind the bridesmaids, to be wed.

The organ music echoed through the great cathedral walls,
The girls began their graceful walk, but she just froze and stalled;
She grabbed a little tighter, to her father's strong embrace,
Looked down the aisle until she saw her love's familiar face.

He stood there, tugging at his collar, swaying side to side,
Then heard the whispers from the front row.."Look! Here comes the bride!"
He wheeled and looked and felt his face take on a growing smile
The most beautiful woman in the world was walking down the aisle.

Her father placed her hand in his and gave a silent nod
And so they stood, exchanging vows before mankind and God
All doubts and fears now disappeared as she became his wife
And, two as one, they now moved on toward a brand new life....

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 05-14-2001).]

Poet deVine

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1 posted 2001-05-14 12:05 PM

Simply magnificent. Well done Kit and Mike.

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2 posted 2001-05-14 12:17 PM

This is as it should be...forever and ever...simply beautiful

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3 posted 2001-05-14 12:21 PM

Oh, how awesome! I loved this!

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4 posted 2001-05-14 12:24 PM

STOP!!!! stop!!!! This is not how the story will end. Let me assure you of this!!!! Do you want the reality or the fanasty version? which will it be - I say this respectfully. I will NOT put certain parties to the "test" to stand up for me - I can do that alone if need be. To be quite honest I'm not a good map reader - and that is the truth!!!

For those who believed in me -May God keep you. There is no fear in love..For perfect love casth out all fear.

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5 posted 2001-05-14 01:06 AM

Kit and Balladeer~
Just so lovely ... you both did a marvelous job on this.

The flow was excellent ... melding perfectly.
~*Marge*~

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Joyce Johnson

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6 posted 2001-05-14 02:46 AM

Really, really nice. And they lived happily everafter. Joyce

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2001-05-14 08:32 AM

this is ADORABLE...
you guys write so well together...
your style  compliments each other so well
and you did this that sweet sense of humor we adore in both of you so...
you took us in PERFECT cadence thru all the many emotions that one would go thru on this day..
and you showed it cleverly thru both sides ponit of view. Loved the guys last minute jitters..lol
very  cool and cute ...
well done poetess and poet of cadence cool

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see the lights faded
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Did you fall for a shooting star
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8 posted 2001-05-14 08:45 AM

A marvelous write, a wonderful read! Well done to both of you! Brought back many memories!

Martie

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9 posted 2001-05-14 08:53 AM

Great job, wonderful read...I enjoyed this so much!

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10 posted 2001-05-14 09:32 AM

Woohooo!!! *applause* Excellent working together you two! BRAVO!!!!!!

Wow! You did a magnificent job telling the story of how nervous everyone gets! LOL Excellent!!

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11 posted 2001-05-14 10:39 AM

Oh how I remember the feelings running through me just before walking down the
aisle. The two of you portrayed both sides
just great. Enjoyed the excitment through
out the whole poem.

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12 posted 2001-05-14 10:48 AM

This is fabulous, just fabulous! Congratulations on a wonderful collaboration.

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and the sun drips honey."
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13 posted 2001-05-14 11:55 AM

I have to love this....although I'm sure mine will be a bit different...right now I'm in an argument with my sister and future mother-in-law because THIS bride steadfastly refuses to wear SHOES!!! rofl...OMG...another sister accused me of trying to kill my father---she said one look at me in the "gown" I picked out and he was going to die laughing! HAS ANYONE EVER BROUGHT THEIR FATHER ALONG WHEN THEY ELOPED? OMG...(serenity exits...trying to take deep breaths...) Loved the poem you two...but now MY nerves are shot!

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14 posted 2001-05-14 12:12 PM

Cute cute cute
(Didnt even realize it was two writers until i looked at the title

your writing style really blends

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15 posted 2001-05-14 12:13 PM

EXCEPTIONALLY AMAZING!!!!!!!

regards to the both of you,
Sudhir

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16 posted 2001-05-14 01:23 PM

Magnificently melded poetic perfection... I loved every word of every line!!! *S* Great job... my applause to two incredible talents!

Kit McCallum

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17 posted 2001-05-14 10:24 PM

~Sharon: Thanks so much for the kind words Sharon, we had a lot of fun with this one, Michael was keeping me in stitches with every verse, LOL!

~Paula: Although the nerves can be terror, this one did end "as it should" ... thank you for enjoying Paula!

~Saunni: So glad you loved this one Saunni, we very much appreciate the wonderful thoughts!

~Latin Passion: Thank you for your enthusiastic response Latin Passion, though I'm not sure what you meant there. It's all fantasy ... no need to take it seriously ... we didn't, LOL.

~Marge: We had a great time writing it Marge. Michael had me laughing everytime I got a verse back. Thank you so much for the lovely sentiments, I'm glad it came across well!

~Joyce: Well, happily ever after has yet to be seen, LOL - maybe there's a sequal in here somewhere? I'm glad you enjoyed Joyce, thank you!

~Janet Marie: ROFL, from penguins to gladiators JM ... I loved those parts too! Thanks so much for all these sweet words, you know I love ya, and really appreciate you!

~Decaflame: Brought back a few memories for me too Decaflame, though I left out the part about my dad giving me half a valium, LOL ... thank you for the kind words!

~Martie: I'm so glad you enjoyed Martie ... It was a really fun write, thanks for the lovely response, much appreciated!

~Rebecca: Thank you so much Becky! Michael's got a great imagination, and a joy to write with, we had a lot of fun with this, glad it came across well!

~Inot2b: It brought back lots of memories for me too Inot2b, I'm happy it brought back some fun ones for you too, very grateful you enjoyed!

~Kathleen: Thank you for the wonderful response Kathleen, it was always a treat waiting to see what Michael would come back with next, LOL. Much appreciated!

~Serenity: ROFL!!!! No shoes???

Ah Serenity ... thank you for the grins. My goodness, you're dad's really in for it, LOL. This was great, I want pictures!

~Cuddlez: What a wonderful thing to say Cuddlez! That's exactly what we hope for when we're writing a duet, to have it feel seemless. This is a wonderful thing to hear, thank you!

~Sudhir: EXCEPTIONALLY wonderful to see your regards here again Sudhir, you have been missed! Thank you for the lovely thoughts!

~Suthern: *Smiling* Thanks so much Suthern, it's always so great to read your responses, I'm so very glad you enjoyed this one, Thank you!

And thank you Michael, it was a pleasure as always sweet poet. You had me laughing from the get-go. You're an amazing writer, this was such fun. Maybe there's a sequal here somewhere, LOL?

Much appreciation to all,
/Kit

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18 posted 2001-05-14 10:26 PM

I could say that this is excellent teamwork and writing, but my words would not be enough. You two are amazing.

Denise

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19 posted 2001-05-14 10:27 PM

Fantastic job, you two! I enjoyed this very much!

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20 posted 2001-05-14 10:46 PM

It was hard to tell if she wrote or he wrote, but I will tell you one thing, you have to do another one! I laughed all the way through this, right down to getting the sparkles in the sister's hair (you guys don't miss a trick!). Absolutely fabulous collaboration you two, bravo!

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21 posted 2001-05-14 10:48 PM

Balladeer,
I double JM. Wonderful write.

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22 posted 2001-05-15 07:21 PM

~Temptress: Your words were "more" than enough Temptress ... thank you so very much!

~Denise: Very happy you enjoyed this little bundle of nerves Denise ... much appreciation to you!

~Mysteria: LOL, I loved that line too Mysteria, thank you for the wonderful comment. This is actually the third duet we've done, and I do hope we'll get a chance to do some more, we have a lot of fun!

~Seymour: Thanks so much Seymour ... how about we double the "thank-you", very grateful you enjoyed!

Much appreciation to all,
/Kit & Michael ... hello? Michael, LOL!

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23 posted 2001-05-15 07:56 PM

Absolutely!!!! HELLO!! My thanks also to you all...I simply sit in the background, allowing Kit to do all the talking, as a newlywed hubby is supposed to do!

I appreciate you all! Kit, let's duet again!!!

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24 posted 2001-05-16 07:18 AM

What a wonderful story, and a great collaboration. Much enjoyed.
Sandra

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25 posted 2001-05-16 08:25 AM

what a fabulous duet, you two are amazing poets....great work.

(((hugs))
Charisma

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26 posted 2001-05-16 09:20 AM

I waited to read this...I knew it would make me cry...it did...

you two.....this is wonderful!!

SEA

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27 posted 2001-05-23 04:56 PM

~Sandra: Thanks so much Sandra, very glad you enjoyed!

~Charisma: Many thanks for the kind words Charisma, much appreciation!

~SEA: Sorry for the cry Susan, but I'm glad you enjoyed it through the tears!

(and ROFL @ Michael ... type a lot, yes ... but talk a lot, nah.

Let's duet again!

Much appreciation to all,
/Kit

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28 posted 2002-07-01 08:25 AM

’Deer dearest heart Kit darling girl again a perfect marriage of words, I love this it is utterly utterly excellent. The truth of this is soooooooo real, I had all this with Emma last year, hers didn’t end so happily, it was indeed the wedding from hell. And I might add it cost a fortune Krissy could give you chapter and verse on being a bridesmaid……

This is superb writing meshed with complete artistry