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Open Poetry #13

Reading, again

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-05-12 10:14 AM

Reading, Again

imparting my own translation

he wrote in “Twenty-One”
from Listen to the Warm
that she was
only a day away

and he missed her already

he had taken up
the luxuries of her
arms

had talked to her
over strong coffee

having shared much more
than you or
I
will ever know
that which was between them

ultimately he missed
even her shadow

then he ended the
moment
as
a child, in want

of life, itself…

would I be that
life
to one

so,
now I go,
to read again

but take with me
a wonder

and you?

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

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Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2001-05-12 10:20 AM

"he had taken up
the luxuries of her
arms"

"ultimately he missed
even her shadow"

Splendid Karilea! I really enjoyed the delicate flow in this piece, softly moving with such a whispered question in conclusion ... just lovely!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-05-12 10:23 AM

me? ... (after reading this most lovely inspire)
I am there with you..reading over your shoulder...
allow me to turn the page...
we will sit in the sun, sip raspberry tea ... and just be...

Good morning Sun

Did you make it to the Milky Way,
see the lights faded
that heaven is overrated
Did you fall for a shooting star
One without a permanent scar

latin passion
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since 2001-04-26

Posts 576

3 posted 2001-05-12 10:36 AM

Your poem has so much compassion, and hit home. e-mail coming your way. lp

For those who believed in me -
I send my love.

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