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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2001-05-11 02:40 AM

Total Quiet

secrets of a soul
words untold
utter not a sound
so silence touches ground
can anyone hear
a voiceless scream
rippling in the still
where ocean reaches stream
time always in motion
always in a rush
where any spoken words
go falling into hush
then……
speech starts a riot
then quickly back to
total quiet

"...the rest is silence" (Hamlet) Shakespeare

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-05-11 09:30 AM

I have heard just that silence, indeed. Well done!

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

2 posted 2001-05-11 09:38 AM

Peace can be Heaven!

A very enjoyable read!

~Tier

Just A Woman
Senior Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

3 posted 2001-05-11 11:03 AM

Much depth, Helen. I loved this!

"I can't remember if I'm the good twin or the evil one."

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

4 posted 2001-05-11 04:32 PM

Compact, powerful, revealing, yet musical.
Excellent!

S Arthur

Whose Night is this, Mine or the Moon's?
J.E.James

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2001-05-11 05:14 PM

enjoyed *s

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Tessa
Member

since 2001-04-21

Posts 67
Ohio

6 posted 2001-05-11 05:16 PM

I found myself continually going back to the phrase "a voiceless scream", and found it almost haunting. I shall read this many times over.

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

7 posted 2001-05-11 05:49 PM

I have known that voiceless scream. I find this very well written. Truly fine work.

Michael

Proust-
"Love is space and time measured by the heart"

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

8 posted 2001-05-11 11:52 PM

then quickly back
to total quiet

I've heard of safety in numbers...guess this is safety in solitude. This screams, however silently, to be heard.

Coal Surrender
Member

since 2001-04-01

Posts 84
U.S.

9 posted 2001-05-16 06:58 AM

I enjoyed this one very much, it seemed to scale between frenzy and calm.

Coal

snowpants
Member Elite

since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

10 posted 2001-05-18 06:49 PM

'time always in motion
always in a rush
where any spoken words
go falling into hush'

Yes, I do know what you mean here...excellent write!

sp

to be with you...
I've tried to hide my passion,
but it's just no use...
piece by piece I lose it
when you walk in the room...

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